this is for the -  LBT Desert Storm Card Battle

Expo: google the word “heir”

kawhi leonard who’s a meme as “fun guy” plays for raptors

we got a new mobile Update

michael desanta in gta v is on the left side of the circle when choosing characters

rare form shit!

The fucks up these long as battles geez niggas I'll come back to this and vote

Expos -

i thot CM PUnk was a multi lol technically he still is since this ain't his original account

Hindus follow Ramayan and most of the traditions are as per Ram, I am a hindu. so the ram say as in gordon ram say play and hell's kitchen was/is his show

Chef is a cook and Punks also meant rotten stuff rest is simple i think.

lemme know if u dnt get any line or have any other questions.

and if you dnt know ay diamons, he used to be a rookie infamous for not rhyming most of his bars let alone multis

thanks for replying punk, knowing that ur an old head now, been a pleasure man!

Wordplays - 

violence (violins)

I’m still probably to 3 youngest LB members today. Lol but word

we got two 13 year olds here so i hope u atleast 18 man lol

Nah I’m 25 lol

Nick your shit is really hard to read. A lot, I mean A LOT of the Multis are broken/don’t rhyme and/or are just waaaaay too stretched out to even come close to sounding good. Not to mention sometimes your shit don’t even make sense man. Grammatically or just in general. Punk won with a muchbcleaner drop and a few solid-to-good lines here. 

WRATH: your opener feels like mad filler. Purgeful isn't even a word is it? they all rhyme but what are you saying? if there's no punchline or youre not saying anything hard hitting with entertainment value its gonna come off as filler. and the Ramsey bar was worded well enough. what ever "Ram say"... who is ram... what is he saying? Get me? wordplay has to work both ways in a sentence. It was ambitious and i appreciate you going for complexity but make sure your wording and execution can hold up the bar. your closing lines were simple but they hit. ideas were there. nothing amazing. You can rhyme multis... thats good. just work on punchlines, wording, and execution. then you'll really improve and be even better. 

PUNK: ooooh that opener would have been heat if you had just set it up differently. Next time i'd introduce the idea of him stealing other peoples shit in the first line or two then close with the punch. the next punch I didn't like so much. Heir/Here doesn't work. play with the raps one wasn't feeling either. Beef with mobile bar was alright but again beefing up that setup would have help it a lot. DeSanta bar and Lyft bars were way too simple c'mon punk. closer was... there. Punk I hope you lightworked the shit out of this verse or are just rusty cause against anyone remotely better these bars won't hold up. fairs in. winner was a bit better.

Thanks for the feedbacks guys this battle was done when i was kinda notoriously experimenting with long ass multis so that 4 syllables may seem more easy to my brain lol. 

The winner held it down with more complexity, and had a more up to par verse. The loser of this battle has some decent material, but needs to have more accuracy with his punchlines.

TheElite