MINE DONT TAKE I GOT THIS ONE Voted: Oversoul / WaDe JaYare
Posted on: 2012-08-09 23:00:23

lil jj , this was a previous battle that we had that didnt get posted. but send 8 if you want to battle Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-08-09 23:05:23

meh fair Voted: Oversoul / WaDe JaYare
Posted on: 2012-08-09 23:41:34

I swear I'm going to have to start doing expos again -.- Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-08-09 23:46:13

HONESTYS THE POLICY Voted: Oversoul / WaDe JaYare
Posted on: 2012-08-09 23:49:16

fv Voted: Oversoul / WaDe JaYare
Posted on: 2012-08-09 23:55:35

this was a pretty weak battle tbh, OVERSOUL- first bar, started off wit a basic endrhyme , then you start cappin more syllables, this is whats referred to as a mismatched multi, i do like the fact you tried to integrate a simile, which was pretty basic imo, off a very played concept/flip.. 'no flow', so in order to make that played concept hit harder, you need to come up wit a more clever or stronger simile, or relation.. maybe 'no flow' like BAD KIDNEY STONES, or like DESERT DESCRIPTIONS, or something more realistic, invisible lakes? imo, its forced... next line started off decent, lobby and wait was pretty funny..next couple lines were again mismatched multis, elephant porn in his crib was pretty forced also, it makes sense in the setup , but the concept is pretty farfetched..over all, you got potential, and i did like the fact you came wit different similes, WADE-ok, first bar was fairly decent opening, as i progress to the next, wheres the multi that corresponds to CASH FOR HEAT MONTHLY? and if this was part of your opening bar, then the bar itself is too long... you need to add another multi within this set, then you went to 'no comp' , ure from 'hard where', then said no comp again? really worded awkward, i was expecting you to flip the 'hard where ' into a wordplay or something, like ure from 'hard where ', like HOMEDEPOT STAFF, but no, i was left hanging..lol that line was again hella long, leading up to your matching multi, which was hella far away..rest of the bars were filler imo, gold metal was probably your next best attempt at a concept/meta.. over all better multi usage, with both of your punches being about even,imo, it came down to scheme structure, and one excelled slightly, fairs in.. Voted: Oversoul / WaDe JaYare
Posted on: 2012-08-11 07:28:57

nb Voted: Oversoul / WaDe JaYare
Posted on: 2012-08-11 08:12:29

What???? Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-08-11 17:01:24

Over: I did like that you came out attacking with every line and stayed consistant doing that... But overall the flow was very choppy and the multi's were off in spaces. You definitely have to work on wording your concepts and punches a bit better so it sounds smoother to the reader.. The biggest thing here is to work on the wording of your verse, punch and set up wise as well as multi wise.... Wade: Opening punches are missing something.. It might be the wording, but I read several times and it just doesn't have that hard punch to it.. After the "cash for heat monthly" it was mad stretched out to get to the continuation of that scheme also... the "gold metal" line I liked, original and recent.. "crippled line" was okay and the closing line didn't do anything tbh. Overall Reword a little bit, I like the concepts you bring and you have the right idea with shit.. Keep it consistant.. Voted: Oversoul / WaDe JaYare
Posted on: 2012-08-12 13:26:21

nice battle overall both came with dope metaphors some wordplay in there very little and the punches were dope as fuck nice battle! Voted: Oversoul / WaDe JaYare
Posted on: 2012-08-12 14:29:43

nice Voted: Oversoul / WaDe JaYare
Posted on: 2012-08-12 16:33:27