this aint a MIC IT IS WRITTEN BUILT N HAVE YU DYiiN iN IT b4 yu TYPE A DIGIT** was ment to be BUILT N HAVE YU DYiiN iN IT n this aint a MIC IT IS WRITTEN so b4 yu TYPE A DIGIT oh wll X .. g.b G Comment Only
Posted on: 2011-04-28 10:46:35

1 had too much clutter in his verse which broke up the flow of the read. The best part was the fact he TRIED to put together long strings but ultimatly ended up falling off in too many places making it even harder to read as I found my self having to back track. A verse with smooth multies and transitions will eliminate that problem. He should maybe start by thinking of concepts and punches before he tries to make his multi strings. As there wasnt anywhere near the amount of punches needed. I seen a bit of played nameplay in there too. The other had a really smooth read. wasn't punch heavy.. Took too clowning using long multi strings which all matched making it easier to get into and laugh at .like the I can't even imagine the smell ... "just THINK OF A CHEESE DIP with a WHIFF N A REAL HINT of the stench that a FISHERMANS BEARD STINKS OF/ Anybody who said they saw him DRINKING A BEERS KIDDING .. i'm not saying that this KID ISN'T SEEN DRINKING but if you asked him for a drink this faggot would MIX YOU A MEAN SPRITZER" lol. That's always been my prefered style of writing but I've found my self get dragged into the whole L.B style. I've always prefered good old fasioned clowning over straight punchlines. Good battle though. Votes in. Good luck Voted: The Real Deal / YOU WISH
Posted on: 2011-04-30 20:11:11

Out-classed. Voted: The Real Deal / YOU WISH
Posted on: 2011-04-30 20:28:54

No Hate, Fair's In. Voted: The Real Deal / YOU WISH
Posted on: 2011-05-01 01:31:42

Fair ones in fellas. Voted: The Real Deal / YOU WISH
Posted on: 2011-05-01 02:29:02

nice Voted: The Real Deal / YOU WISH
Posted on: 2011-05-02 12:11:16

damn... this is REAL hot shit. ones flow wuz EXTREMELY choppy, but it had really nice punches and the whole nine. but the other verse... honestly dat verse hurt my head cuz im trynna figure shit out. the flow wuz so smooth, just the verse itself wuz phenominal. the punches were sublimental but they were hard to figure out, and i thought i wuz good when it came to figuring those out. i skimmed thru his verse, and read it 4 times and got a head ache just cuz i had to figure the thing out, the other one i had to read twice to git the flow right but the punches were nice but easier to figure out. so i know who im picking, fair vote always. GL both Voted: The Real Deal / YOU WISH
Posted on: 2011-05-02 21:45:01

you wish your organizations was key much respect the real deal loved the rhyme scheme Voted: The Real Deal / YOU WISH
Posted on: 2011-05-03 07:28:51