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Unread 03-23-2012, 04:28 PM
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that shit huff yo...

lol...

obviously a solid and well put together concept..only thing maybe is to emphasize that you are REITERATING that he aint clappin nothing. if the reader doesnt get that...it may seem like you are just saying it twice....although i get that you are emphasizing shit...maybe like, "..HAPPY MEAL!!...once again dont SAY YOU.."

small shit i know lol...but it could help
Nah thanks for real its easy to forget lil bits of wording that polishes it off.
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Unread 03-23-2012, 04:28 PM   #15
 
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Originally Posted by Itz Killz View Post
that shit huff yo...

lol...

obviously a solid and well put together concept..only thing maybe is to emphasize that you are REITERATING that he aint clappin nothing. if the reader doesnt get that...it may seem like you are just saying it twice....although i get that you are emphasizing shit...maybe like, "..HAPPY MEAL!!...once again dont SAY YOU.."

small shit i know lol...but it could help
Nah thanks for real its easy to forget lil bits of wording that polishes it off.
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