https://www.letsbeef.com/battle_deta...n=tb&id=406645
PROBLEM CLOCKA, I'm the PROBLEM DOCTA// Dog you wouldn't go hard if you were alive after I SHOT YA// Ya pitch is 'pure wack', off centered and OLD FASHIONED// The kid is 'keystylin' and Ima still give your head a BASHING// If you wanna fuck with the kid then STEP UP// Off the top flowin crazy ya no I'M NUTS// You's better 'step the fuck back' before the kid turns 'subway' and gives you a CLEAN CUT// And I aint talkin about no ARMY SHIT// Dog your just a BARBIE BITCH// Your flow's off and your bars deliver that kinda SNOBBY PITCH..Yah ya no the team, SaVage Scriptz all day, Bnas, LETS GET IT
PROBLEM CLOCKA, I'm the PROBLEM DOCTA// Dog you wouldn't go hard if you were alive after I SHOT YA//
Analytics:
- 3 syllable scheme (basic)
- Repetitive usage of the word "PROBLEM"
- Poor conceptually - to say someone wouldn't go hard if they survived you shooting them seems backwards
Bar Grade:
C-
Ya pitch is 'pure wack', off centered and OLD FASHIONED// The kid is 'keystylin' and Ima still give your head a BASHING//
Analytics:
- 3 syllable scheme + broken/choppy execution
- Schemes have poor wording (faSHION and baSHING end differently in sound and rhythmic value)
- No punch or concept of a punch present
- Bar is criminally short, and not developed at all
Bar Grade:
D
If you wanna fuck with the kid then STEP UP// Off the top flowin crazy ya no I'M NUTS// You's better 'step the fuck back' before the kid turns 'subway' and gives you a CLEAN CUT//
Analytics:
- 3 syllable scheme (basic)
- extremely played concept by relating "crazy" and "nuts"
- Broken scheme (STEP up, IM nuts, CLEAN cut have different sounds and rhythmic value)
- Concept is pretty decent considering the time this was posted (subway/clean cut)
Bar Rating:
C
The last bar I didn't feel like doing, but yeah...breaking Bnas shit down could run us up to 2K easy.