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this was deep really... a fucking pretty consistent read considering the length and storyline. the story did wonders which was a plus in your approach as it kept on giving rather than stalling or just coasting. the rhyme scheme was pretty ABABABAB style but you worded your sentences clean and to the point of the line said. the internals was great but would have loved to see more flex on the rhyme scheme as far as multies and metaphors are concerned but this here was a great read. fluid thru start to end and real clean wording to add again. props on this man nice read

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this was deep really... a fucking pretty consistent read considering the length and storyline. the story did wonders which was a plus in your approach as it kept on giving rather than stalling or just coasting. the rhyme scheme was pretty ABABABAB style but you worded your sentences clean and to the point of the line said. the internals was great but would have loved to see more flex on the rhyme scheme as far as multies and metaphors are concerned but this here was a great read. fluid thru start to end and real clean wording to add again. props on this man nice read

keep scribin'
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