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12-31-2014, 11:16 AM
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"I'm 25, you 15? that's a DISASTEROUS RECIPE! wrong punchline and them CATS IS ARRESTIN ME then I'll end up on an ACTUAL REGISTRY!! So don't think when I say I'm "puttin ROCKETS IN YA ABDOMEN" or I'll "POP YOU IN YA ASS AND SHIT..." that for even a second I found you ATTRACTIVE, Uh, SEXUALLY!!/"
No offnce but thats garbage, whoever wrote that.
It's a clasic case of someone taking a concept and dragging it on so long to the point they lose direction. horribly stretched, terrible wording and all round poorly executed
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"I'm 25, you 15? that's a DISASTEROUS RECIPE! wrong punchline and them CATS IS ARRESTIN ME then I'll end up on an ACTUAL REGISTRY!! So don't think when I say I'm "puttin ROCKETS IN YA ABDOMEN" or I'll "POP YOU IN YA ASS AND SHIT..." that for even a second I found you ATTRACTIVE, Uh, SEXUALLY!!/"
No offnce but thats garbage, whoever wrote that.
It's a clasic case of someone taking a concept and dragging it on so long to the point they lose direction. horribly stretched, terrible wording and all round poorly executed
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12-31-2014, 11:18 AM
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"I'm 25, you 15? that's a DISASTEROUS RECIPE! wrong punchline and them CATS IS ARRESTIN ME then I'll end up on an ACTUAL REGISTRY!! So don't think when I say I'm "puttin ROCKETS IN YA ABDOMEN" or I'll "POP YOU IN YA ASS AND SHIT..." that for even a second I found you ATTRACTIVE, Uh, SEXUALLY!!/"
No offnce but thats garbage, whoever wrote that.
It's a clasic case of someone taking a concept and dragging it on so long to the point they lose direction. horribly stretched, terrible wording and all round poorly executed
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You see, you're being all technical about it. I read it as "I flowed through it perfectly and that was a funny diss on Verity when she was only 15".
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"I'm 25, you 15? that's a DISASTEROUS RECIPE! wrong punchline and them CATS IS ARRESTIN ME then I'll end up on an ACTUAL REGISTRY!! So don't think when I say I'm "puttin ROCKETS IN YA ABDOMEN" or I'll "POP YOU IN YA ASS AND SHIT..." that for even a second I found you ATTRACTIVE, Uh, SEXUALLY!!/"
No offnce but thats garbage, whoever wrote that.
It's a clasic case of someone taking a concept and dragging it on so long to the point they lose direction. horribly stretched, terrible wording and all round poorly executed
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You see, you're being all technical about it. I read it as "I flowed through it perfectly and that was a funny diss on Verity when she was only 15".
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12-31-2014, 11:20 AM
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No. I read it naturally. The problem is you can't translate your thoughts into rhyming written word. It might work for you. (doesn't it for everybody)
Thats a battling cliche.
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No. I read it naturally. The problem is you can't translate your thoughts into rhyming written word. It might work for you. (doesn't it for everybody)
Thats a battling cliche.
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12-31-2014, 11:22 AM
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It's from Illimit, not me.
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It's from Illimit, not me.
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12-31-2014, 11:28 AM
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When you said it was on Verity I assumed it was you since you 2 had a thing.
Either way the shits not good. Its horribly constructed. I can't read it naturally if the shit does its damdest to not allow me by being such a jumbled eyesore.
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Just to reinforce the point.
I speak english. When I read I expect the material to be grammatically correct and as a result flow naturally. Thats just how my brain functions. So if I'm seeing problems its not because I'm LOOKING for them. it's because they're blatantly there begging for my attention.
That shit reads like a retarded kid wrote it. It's an absolute mess.
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When you said it was on Verity I assumed it was you since you 2 had a thing.
Either way the shits not good. Its horribly constructed. I can't read it naturally if the shit does its damdest to not allow me by being such a jumbled eyesore.
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Just to reinforce the point.
I speak english. When I read I expect the material to be grammatically correct and as a result flow naturally. Thats just how my brain functions. So if I'm seeing problems its not because I'm LOOKING for them. it's because they're blatantly there begging for my attention.
That shit reads like a retarded kid wrote it. It's an absolute mess.
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12-31-2014, 11:30 AM
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When you said it was on Verity I assumed it was you since you 2 had a thing.
Either way the shits not good. Its horribly constructed. I can't read it naturally if the shit does its damdest to not allow me by being such a jumbled eyesore.
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Just to reinforce the point.
I speak english. When I read I expected the material to be grammatically correct and as a result flow naturally. Thats just how my brain functions. So if I'm seeing problems its not because I'm LOOKING for them. it's because they're blatantly there begging for my attention.
That shit reads like a retarded kid wrote it. It's an absolute mess.
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I'm cool with shit being "ebonic'd up" and being a little less grammatically sound.
And my ducked verse against Verity was motherfucking flawless!
http://www.letsbeef.com/battle_detai...n=tb&id=465098
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Originally Posted by Indianapolis Jones
When you said it was on Verity I assumed it was you since you 2 had a thing.
Either way the shits not good. Its horribly constructed. I can't read it naturally if the shit does its damdest to not allow me by being such a jumbled eyesore.
---------- Post added at 11:28 AM ---------- Previous post was at 11:25 AM ----------
Just to reinforce the point.
I speak english. When I read I expected the material to be grammatically correct and as a result flow naturally. Thats just how my brain functions. So if I'm seeing problems its not because I'm LOOKING for them. it's because they're blatantly there begging for my attention.
That shit reads like a retarded kid wrote it. It's an absolute mess.
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I'm cool with shit being "ebonic'd up" and being a little less grammatically sound.
And my ducked verse against Verity was motherfucking flawless!
http://www.letsbeef.com/battle_detai...n=tb&id=465098
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It's not even about ebonics though (for the most part) If you gonna use ebonics it has to atleast not be blatanty shoehorned in as replacement because you can't think of the correct rhyming word to fit the syllable count and concept. I.E
"I'm 25, you 15? that's a DISASTEROUS RECIPE! wrong punchline and them CATS IS ARRESTIN ME
Then it gets even worse and this isn't even a form of ebonics. it's just a straight up brain cramp.
"ATTRACTIVE, Uh, SEXUALLY!!/"
I new he was going to say SEXUALLY. The Uh is supposed to be suggestive of taking another angle. but because the angle is so obvious it doesn't work and it didnt even need to be there so sticks out as nothing else than what it was, a desperate attempt to even the syllable count.
And you know what. I din't need to LOOK for it. it's obvious right off the bat.
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It's not even about ebonics though (for the most part) If you gonna use ebonics it has to atleast not be blatanty shoehorned in as replacement because you can't think of the correct rhyming word to fit the syllable count and concept. I.E
"I'm 25, you 15? that's a DISASTEROUS RECIPE! wrong punchline and them CATS IS ARRESTIN ME
Then it gets even worse and this isn't even a form of ebonics. it's just a straight up brain cramp.
"ATTRACTIVE, Uh, SEXUALLY!!/"
I new he was going to say SEXUALLY. The Uh is supposed to be suggestive of taking another angle. but because the angle is so obvious it doesn't work and it didnt even need to be there so sticks out as nothing else than what it was, a desperate attempt to even the syllable count.
And you know what. I din't need to LOOK for it. it's obvious right off the bat.
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Lol... what it boils down to is there are many flaws in both of their verses.not all the ryming is perfect..and if a good voter was fucked to drop a 64 line breakdown then the slant/forced multis wouldve been brought up to light... as a compostion the particular style phro pulled off is nicely done scheme wise.. and being that he schemed the entire verse boosts the rating up a bit.. was it perfect?far from it... did it have its share of very played concepts ?definately... matrix punch immediatly comes to mind..is this battle better than anything curently out ..imo yes... btw. Racist endevour and playing to gether rhymes alot better than probable /godly feud.. as a multi.. and wouldve flowed better if godly feud wasnt the end of the multi and more towards the beginning... ex..
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Lol... what it boils down to is there are many flaws in both of their verses.not all the ryming is perfect..and if a good voter was fucked to drop a 64 line breakdown then the slant/forced multis wouldve been brought up to light... as a compostion the particular style phro pulled off is nicely done scheme wise.. and being that he schemed the entire verse boosts the rating up a bit.. was it perfect?far from it... did it have its share of very played concepts ?definately... matrix punch immediatly comes to mind..is this battle better than anything curently out ..imo yes... btw. Racist endevour and playing to gether rhymes alot better than probable /godly feud.. as a multi.. and wouldve flowed better if godly feud wasnt the end of the multi and more towards the beginning... ex..
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reefer didnt even rhyme well
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reefer didnt even rhyme well
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The Pettis punch was really good.
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The Pettis punch was really good.
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