02-02-2014, 04:13 PM
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Originally Posted by Sax0joE
I got one for that!
WORST DAY IN HISTORY
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Yup! Fits perfectly.
Quote:
Originally Posted by Sax0joE
Also this is a small fragment of a test verse im working on...
My blood runs hotter than 'tea kettles' and words hit like TORNADOS! I'll pump you full of lead till you 'bleed metals' worse than VOLCANOS! So you think your a COOL RAPPER? Nah more like a POO PACKER! Ya too slow in this game me im like SCHUMACHER!
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The beginning bar's multi was broken. Let's break this down syllable wise to check out if it rhymes perfectly or not (If you can't tell from just sounding it out). TOR-NA-DOS/VOL-CA-NOS. Se how NA/CA and DOS/NOS rhyme but TOR/VOL doesn't? That renders this multi broken, or not rhymable. The next bar was alright multi wise but COOL RAPPER/POO PACKER/SCHUMACHER are only 3 syllables, so it's nothing great. Also, you have the tiniest bit of a break in the multi with "COOL" because it doesn't rhyme with POO/SCHU, but I doubt anyone will give you any grief over that because it's so miniscule.
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