Uncival: Concept was kind of cliche, the idea of the thug/drug dealer cleaning his act up comes up pretty often. You pulled it off well, though. As always, your flow was on point, and it probably sounded the best out of the three. The imagery was pretty good, you used a lot of description. You did a good job of telling a story, and I thought the "I love you" line was especially hard hitting. The only real problem I had with it was its length. If it had been maybe 4-6 more lines, you probably would have won. Overall, solid verse.
MUGGZ: First of all, the concept here was really creative. Out of all the verses, you definitely had the most original, and I loved the first-person perspective. It almost reminded me of a kid movie in a way. The narrative was probably the best of the three. It was pretty emotional at the end, you captured the feelings of the microphone pretty well. I picked up on the flow eventually, although you really have to work on formatting if you want to make it much further. I enjoyed reading it, though.
padded cell: The approach you took was pretty original, although I didn't really see how it tied into the topic as much as the other two. You did a good job with vocabulary, and some of your descriptions and imagery were pretty hard hitting. You didn't really tie it all together as good as you could have, and the flow wasn't really there most of the time with the exception of a few good multis. The verse definitely had a lot of potential, but it could have been pulled off better. I also docked you for the end being kind of unclear, since I couldn't really understand whether he was a prisoner of war again and/or how exactly that marked a new beginning.
MVGT: M U G G Z
Runner-up: UnCival Eyez (really close)
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