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#7 11-30-2013, 10:20 AM

The three of you had COMPLETELY different takes on one piece. Which led me to enjoy this an awful lot.
Padded: I like the story. I felt it was a bit choppy due to the length of your lines. If you cut down the syllables per lines it really helps out the flow. Rhyming was decent, I would like to see a bit of imagery and color through vocab though, but overall it was a good piece.

Punk: Again you brought a good piece. The rhyming and flow was on point. The story was good. I just felt the imagery could of been kicked up a notch. You had good spots of imagery here and there but I wanted to see it throughout because I know you're good with it.

Mcjewfro: Overall was the best piece here. It had pretty much everything other than an extensive vocab. Flow was good, structure was good, imagery was decent, rhyming was good. Story progression was wonderful. Definitely didn't expect this out of you, it just edged it.
MVGT: Mcjewfro

And my runner up is going to be Punk!

11-30-2013, 10:20 AM

The three of you had COMPLETELY different takes on one piece. Which led me to enjoy this an awful lot.
Padded: I like the story. I felt it was a bit choppy due to the length of your lines. If you cut down the syllables per lines it really helps out the flow. Rhyming was decent, I would like to see a bit of imagery and color through vocab though, but overall it was a good piece.

Punk: Again you brought a good piece. The rhyming and flow was on point. The story was good. I just felt the imagery could of been kicked up a notch. You had good spots of imagery here and there but I wanted to see it throughout because I know you're good with it.

Mcjewfro: Overall was the best piece here. It had pretty much everything other than an extensive vocab. Flow was good, structure was good, imagery was decent, rhyming was good. Story progression was wonderful. Definitely didn't expect this out of you, it just edged it.
MVGT: Mcjewfro

And my runner up is going to be Punk!

11-30-2013, 10:20 AM	#7
Enfinite Guest Voted: 0 audio / 0 text Posts: n/a Mentioned: Post(s) Tagged: Thread(s)	The three of you had COMPLETELY different takes on one piece. Which led me to enjoy this an awful lot. Padded: I like the story. I felt it was a bit choppy due to the length of your lines. If you cut down the syllables per lines it really helps out the flow. Rhyming was decent, I would like to see a bit of imagery and color through vocab though, but overall it was a good piece. Punk: Again you brought a good piece. The rhyming and flow was on point. The story was good. I just felt the imagery could of been kicked up a notch. You had good spots of imagery here and there but I wanted to see it throughout because I know you're good with it. Mcjewfro: Overall was the best piece here. It had pretty much everything other than an extensive vocab. Flow was good, structure was good, imagery was decent, rhyming was good. Story progression was wonderful. Definitely didn't expect this out of you, it just edged it. MVGT: Mcjewfro And my runner up is going to be Punk!