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Unread 11-29-2013, 04:18 PM
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padded cell - your drop was cool. you had some nice imagery here and there, like this line: "the orb radiated with a glimmering flash": & I saw in my mind, and orb doing the exact same. I felt like, there were spots where you could've went into detail a bit more, so you kinda left me hanging. flow was iffy a couple of times but conceptually, this was dope.

Punk The God - your story was okay. it seemed a bit bland to me. you had nice flow & all but it seemed that was what you were only focused on. your substance count lacked for me.

mcjewfro - your drop was dope. it had a Joell Ortiz feel to it if you know what I mean. it was deep, flowed great, & it ended awesomely. "But then my hands moved on to bigger, even better things
As they opened the box to give my girlfriend Stephanie a wedding ring
And guess what? She said yes to me, hands sweating out of ecstacy
That night my hand caressed her cheek as I pressed her chest to me..." <--- That sealed the deal for me.

MVGT - mcjewfro (change your name, lmao)
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Unread 11-29-2013, 04:18 PM   #6
 
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padded cell - your drop was cool. you had some nice imagery here and there, like this line: "the orb radiated with a glimmering flash": & I saw in my mind, and orb doing the exact same. I felt like, there were spots where you could've went into detail a bit more, so you kinda left me hanging. flow was iffy a couple of times but conceptually, this was dope.

Punk The God - your story was okay. it seemed a bit bland to me. you had nice flow & all but it seemed that was what you were only focused on. your substance count lacked for me.

mcjewfro - your drop was dope. it had a Joell Ortiz feel to it if you know what I mean. it was deep, flowed great, & it ended awesomely. "But then my hands moved on to bigger, even better things
As they opened the box to give my girlfriend Stephanie a wedding ring
And guess what? She said yes to me, hands sweating out of ecstacy
That night my hand caressed her cheek as I pressed her chest to me..." <--- That sealed the deal for me.

MVGT - mcjewfro (change your name, lmao)
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