Onarolle: Your story was very jumbled. I understood the overall theme and topic you were going for and how you related it to the picture but the progression wasnt there. I feel like you didn't flesh it out start to finish very well. Imagery was there a bit, but the flow and rhyming needed work as well.
Fidel Z: Your story was decent. It had more in it than Rolles but again, I feel like it could of been fleshed out better in terms of progression and imagery. Your rhyming and flow was good though. It made the piece easier and more enjoyable to read through. Working on the story and imagery for you and you'd be improving.
MVGT: Fidel Z
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