FAYZ JUDGEMENT:
I felt Anarchist and Eth were pretty much tied, they both showed relevance to the concept and the ability to effectively implement it in a punch; HOWEVER, in regards to the effectiveness of an expo I think that Anarchist may have edged a little bit because he definitely blended a variety of concepts that may have fit several situations in terms of explaining how something should be done, then again Eth was just as valid because not all the time does expoing something need to be as intricate as what Anarchist did... (I honestly don't know who to pick in this round, I mean it really all depends on what you're looking for here Illo, like would intricate>concise in this case)
X-cal came in last because for one, he failed to use the concept in proper context and instead transformed it into a different concept. On top of that, it was a stretched wordplay (man anakin does not equal mannequin). Moreover the line in general just didn't really hold substance as a punch. I mean "you wouldn't be a man-Anakin if you were to stand in shop windows" , what is a man-anakin and why would someone want to be tht, r maybe he's saying you wouldn't be a Man, Anakin, either the wordplay was pretty forced and the setup leading up to it was pretty weak. Fairs in
oskars judgement:
1)EtH - Short and to the point
2)Anarchist - Had some filler imo but delivered a good enough bar
3)X-Calibur- Too much filler especially the cutting ur cock with blows part...whut? lol. Plus Anarchist and EtH kept it on topic he just tried a wordplay that had nothing to do with the topic
JUST C'S JUDGEMENT:
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Originally Posted by ILLoKWENT
XCALIBER-
"Ill end this boy with a THUDWHEN IM DROPPING FLOWS turn him to a girl cuz im CUTTING YA COCK WITH BLOWS See when im done ya wont be a "Man-Anakin (mannequin)" if you where STOOD IN A SHOP WINDOW.."
There's so much wrong with this bar. Clichéd filler "set ups" like "Dropping Flows" with a weird un natural statement of intent "Cut his cock with blows" what? you couldn't have come up with anything better? Mannequin play just doesn't work because it's Man-A(N)akin not Man-Aakin. You basically displayed all the very same flaws you was advising people to cut out in the last round. Pretty sloppy bar, no hate but it's all over the place
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anarchist-
"Ill 'son you' like Ana Kin (Anakin) you’ll be DEAD BY LIGHT STICKS, n if you’ve READ THA TIGHT SCRIPTS you’ll know not to fuck with the HEAD OF THE RIGHT SITHS n u can’t stop these Jabs' like JEDI KNIGHT TRICKS!"
Son you like Anakin, pretty boring and obvious start. They are light SABRES not light STICKS lol. you called them sticks to make the multi's match rather than working out another way around the correct name which is just lazy. Read The Tight Scripts? Yawwwn, what does that have to do with anything?
That's just cringey L.B text "Ebonics" lol tight scripts. "Head of the RIGHT Siths"? ... Now I could be missing something and my Star Wars Knowledge isn't great, but I thought all Siths were bad guys. I didn't know there were RIGHT and wrong Siths? again it looks like you put in a word/words in there that have no relevance to anything other than to make the multi's fit. NO! ... no!.. *POINTS FINGER* ..NO!.
Cut that shit out my man. The final punch. I'm assuming you mean Jabba The Hut = Jabs the way you capped the J? I dunno. If so with the Jedi Knight Tricks and "STOP THESE jabs" set up it isn't specific enough, it's too vauge. and if you didn't mean Jabba and you meant punches then it doesn't really mean anything. You coulda put a whole host of things in replace of Jedi Knight Tricks and it woulda had more relevance to the Jabs set up.
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Eth-
"Acts BLACK AND THE GUYS SLAUGHTERED cause he couldn't be on the dark side as ANAKIN SKYWALKER"
Set up coulda done without the rhyming to just match highlighted red. Dark Side Race is pretty obvious but other than that atleast you kept it simple and clean unlike the others
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Order:
Eth
Xcalibur (Only just tops An, You could make a case for either for a few reasons)
Anarchist
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