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Originally Posted by John Dos
is a verse like this worthy of a 5?
Since dudes still trash this'll be an easy win. Boots,sigs,mask clips filled? Bitch that's medium. If I was going hard id show no regard. Poke then scar ya throat with swords. Choke this broad till them vocal chords Violet Boregard(Willy wonka). I'll swing a bat man. Then aim, point when that sig smoking either you'll die or end up with Banes voice.(cigarette smoke)...rebel flow destroy ya. Puns delahoya. Dumb ass, one pump blast leave you looking disgusting as fuck like an episode of hoarders. goons run through ya place swarming. Take you to the top balcony watch "get air over the rail" but you ain't skate boardin.
---BUT IF I HAD IT LIKE THIS I WOULD GET 10'S...
ain't shit changed. *sigh*
Wordplay is there. Multis are there. Puns are there. Flow is def there. LB will never improve until people get smarter and learn how to properly read a verse. Also, the forced trash I see these days ain't hot. If it wouldn't be ill spoken aloud, then it's NOT COOL.
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Since dudes still trash this'll be an easy win.
^Filler...has nothing in relation to the following line
Boots,sigs,mask clips filled? Bitch that's medium.
^Again, Filler.
If I was going hard id show no regard. Poke then scar ya throat with swords. Choke this broad till them vocal chords Violet Boregard(Willy wonka).
Each line in this is also filler fam. Also, the wording of the punch is bad "vocal chords Violet Boregard"...that's poor wording an a very weak punch. The "build ups" to this punch have nothing to do with it, it's self.
I'll swing a bat man. Then aim, point when that sig smoking either you'll die or end up with Banes voice.(cigarette smoke)...
Not THAT bad of a concept, but weakly executed. Don't see what "banes voice" is rhyming with either. If it was a "run on line" into the next one then it's keep the momentum of flow going, but it's not. It just stops dead there.
rebel flow destroy ya. Puns delahoya.
^Again, filler...they rhyme, but that's all...has nothing to do with the following piece(s)
Dumb ass, one pump blast leave you looking disgusting as fuck like an episode of hoarders.
^So far, your best line an it's holding no weight.
goons run through ya place swarming. Take you to the top balcony watch "get air over the rail" but you ain't skate boardin.
^Ok, best line in the piece. the wording on "The top balcony watch get"...thats fucked. Still, best line in the whole lot.
Overall, dude it was an extremely weak drop. Personally i'd give it a 3...4 if i was in a really good mood, an i'm never in a good mood lol. Keep at it though, gotta shake a lot of rust of Dose.
P.S. using CAPS as an excuse for not getting votes on a drop like that is seriously stupid, it was the content you put forth that warranted the rating of a Generous 5 (not bad).