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Unread 01-17-2013, 09:42 PM
loose logic
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beat sounds nice on the intro...

first verse - flow is okay.. delivery needs alot of work imo.. some parts sound unnatural... lyrics are good.. quality is okay..
verse 2 - flow is about the same as the first.. deliver is better ... lyrics are equal .. quality about the same as well..
verse 3 - this is much better here.. delivery and flow is more polished here.. lyrics are bout the same as the other 2 verses..


over all its cool. like the concept.. just to the first 2 on the track.. try to put more emotion and confidence into your delivery .. makes it more believable that way... u gotta make the listener feel like these lyrics mean something to you.. otherwise why would they believe it. u know

keep droppin.. good shit.
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beat sounds nice on the intro...

first verse - flow is okay.. delivery needs alot of work imo.. some parts sound unnatural... lyrics are good.. quality is okay..
verse 2 - flow is about the same as the first.. deliver is better ... lyrics are equal .. quality about the same as well..
verse 3 - this is much better here.. delivery and flow is more polished here.. lyrics are bout the same as the other 2 verses..


over all its cool. like the concept.. just to the first 2 on the track.. try to put more emotion and confidence into your delivery .. makes it more believable that way... u gotta make the listener feel like these lyrics mean something to you.. otherwise why would they believe it. u know

keep droppin.. good shit.
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