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**Phroxen** · #46 11-28-2012, 11:09 PM

@~SHINIGAMI~

Can be pronounced =/= is pronounced.
Schnapps is of German origin, and has a soft a sound. They don't even have the "a" sound (hat, bat, cat) in their language. I speak it. I know what I'm talking about, and you do not.

Also, even beyond that, SNAP =/= SCHNAPPS for two more reasons. One: the latter ends with an "s". Two: the latter starts with a "sh" sound. It was wrong on three levels total.

For your bar relevance, you got a generous 7. Like I said, your concepts (ideas for your punches) didn't "connect" because there was nothing behind them.

"Bars Open" --> TAKE THE SHOTS
"heat sensation" --> bitter face as if they TASTED SCOTCH
PRO-SNAP/SCHNAPP --> "Punch" will give ya a "WALK ON THE MOON"

None of those examples are punches, they are just references to something else. It's like saying... You're gonna "take these shots" like you ordered some alcohol or I got "bars" like places where people get drunk. Both of those are concepts that deal with alcohol, but they are not punches. Say that in front of a crowd and you will get boo'd off stage immediately.

Going even further, here's that drink of yours:

2 oz blackberry schnapps
1 oz vodka
3 oz cola
3 oz milk

Milk and coke? No one drinks that shit. If you're going to make a reference to an alcohol, make it relevant to your audience.

**Phroxen** · 11-28-2012, 11:09 PM

@~SHINIGAMI~

Can be pronounced =/= is pronounced.
Schnapps is of German origin, and has a soft a sound. They don't even have the "a" sound (hat, bat, cat) in their language. I speak it. I know what I'm talking about, and you do not.

Also, even beyond that, SNAP =/= SCHNAPPS for two more reasons. One: the latter ends with an "s". Two: the latter starts with a "sh" sound. It was wrong on three levels total.

For your bar relevance, you got a generous 7. Like I said, your concepts (ideas for your punches) didn't "connect" because there was nothing behind them.

"Bars Open" --> TAKE THE SHOTS
"heat sensation" --> bitter face as if they TASTED SCOTCH
PRO-SNAP/SCHNAPP --> "Punch" will give ya a "WALK ON THE MOON"

None of those examples are punches, they are just references to something else. It's like saying... You're gonna "take these shots" like you ordered some alcohol or I got "bars" like places where people get drunk. Both of those are concepts that deal with alcohol, but they are not punches. Say that in front of a crowd and you will get boo'd off stage immediately.

Going even further, here's that drink of yours:

2 oz blackberry schnapps
1 oz vodka
3 oz cola
3 oz milk

Milk and coke? No one drinks that shit. If you're going to make a reference to an alcohol, make it relevant to your audience.

11-28-2012, 11:09 PM	#46
Phroxen <Legion of Doom> Hall Of Famer I am Him 2x Grand Champion One Bar Legend Cypher Champion Scheme Champion Concept Champion One Bar Champion Ranked Audio Record 3 Won / 0 Lost Ranked Text Record 135 Won / 14 Lost Join Date: Dec 2011 Voted: 105 audio / 536 text Posts: 955 Mentioned: 673 Post(s) Tagged: 49 Thread(s)	@~SHINIGAMI~ Can be pronounced =/= is pronounced. Schnapps is of German origin, and has a soft a sound. They don't even have the "a" sound (hat, bat, cat) in their language. I speak it. I know what I'm talking about, and you do not. Also, even beyond that, SNAP =/= SCHNAPPS for two more reasons. One: the latter ends with an "s". Two: the latter starts with a "sh" sound. It was wrong on three levels total. For your bar relevance, you got a generous 7. Like I said, your concepts (ideas for your punches) didn't "connect" because there was nothing behind them. "Bars Open" --> TAKE THE SHOTS "heat sensation" --> bitter face as if they TASTED SCOTCH PRO-SNAP/SCHNAPP --> "Punch" will give ya a "WALK ON THE MOON" None of those examples are punches, they are just references to something else. It's like saying... You're gonna "take these shots" like you ordered some alcohol or I got "bars" like places where people get drunk. Both of those are concepts that deal with alcohol, but they are not punches. Say that in front of a crowd and you will get boo'd off stage immediately. Going even further, here's that drink of yours: 2 oz blackberry schnapps 1 oz vodka 3 oz cola 3 oz milk Milk and coke? No one drinks that shit. If you're going to make a reference to an alcohol, make it relevant to your audience. __________________ The New Victim Read. Rate. Revel. The New Victim II Rage Revisited. Last edited by Phroxen; 11-28-2012 at 11:16 PM.
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