Ok 2 different styles here
Dono your shit was cool..... like the metaphor or not even that but how you revealed the plot had me thinking one thing at first then another..... didn't like end much shit flowed well for a quick concise read was paced nicely like i said just wasnt feeling the ending like once i realized they was just fucken i kinda smiled but was like "oh" but cool verse i can dig it
KF
Ok this is not conventional at all, but i can look past that, this is a keystyle? I mean theres just really nothing but bars I see how you intergrated oylmpic themes but it was awkward at parts some was good some hits an misses as far as cyphers go... i dunno know what this is i mean u go from spitting bars to a story i guess some dialoge i wasn't feeling much... think you need to shorten your lines up some get your flow a lil tighter an work on plot development
v/ Dono
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