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Unread 06-27-2012, 03:13 PM
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At Parts It Was Good But The Whole "Rap Talk" That EtH Was Talking About It Made It Seem Very Childish And Your Whole View On The Subject Got Torn Apart At That Point. Don't Get It Twisted Though, It's Fine To Cuss BUT You've Got To Have A Purpose For It Beyond Explaining A Situation, Like Try To Be More Verbal Like Instead Of:
"turned herself into a Hypocrite, now all she does is Grip the Dick, of random motherfuckers, can you see my dissidence?"
I'd Say It Like:
"She turned into a hypocrite, all she does is slip on dicks just for the fun of it...selfish bitch...yet I love her but I could never trust her, I can just feel the filth whenever I hug her, it's so sick, now can you see my dissidence?"

IDK Take It For What It's Worth.
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Unread 06-27-2012, 03:13 PM   #8
 
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At Parts It Was Good But The Whole "Rap Talk" That EtH Was Talking About It Made It Seem Very Childish And Your Whole View On The Subject Got Torn Apart At That Point. Don't Get It Twisted Though, It's Fine To Cuss BUT You've Got To Have A Purpose For It Beyond Explaining A Situation, Like Try To Be More Verbal Like Instead Of:
"turned herself into a Hypocrite, now all she does is Grip the Dick, of random motherfuckers, can you see my dissidence?"
I'd Say It Like:
"She turned into a hypocrite, all she does is slip on dicks just for the fun of it...selfish bitch...yet I love her but I could never trust her, I can just feel the filth whenever I hug her, it's so sick, now can you see my dissidence?"

IDK Take It For What It's Worth.
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