Rhyming Scheme/Flow: Skills ... Not the craziest approach to a flow, but stayed clean.
Vocabulary: Skills... Both could have used more of a vocab approach, but Skills had the edge.
Topic/Meaning: Skills... Straightforward interpretation of the pic, but definitely not bad.
Storytelling/Progression: Skills... I think you need to go out of the box a little more, but you got this hands down.
Emotion: Closest category, but Skills again. Both seemed to go light with the emotion IMO.
Imagery: Skills painted more pictures for me...
Poetic Techniques: Skills, V called it, both could use more technique to the poetry side of it.
Ending: Definitely Skills.... you did your thing.
Overall: Skills. You could be a beast if you upped the personal content and emotion. Unyqe, work on a tighter structure.
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