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Unread 02-18-2012, 09:01 PM
RhetoriK
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My critique isn't on the content. You need to get the fundementals (run on sentences, etc) dialed in. Like I've been saying it's real introspect, its hard to really 'judge' writing with that undertone. It's definatley edgy. i could imagine this as a Kevin Spacey dioaloge beginning/ending a movie.
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Unread 02-18-2012, 09:01 PM   #3
 
RhetoriK
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32 Won / 13 Lost
Estimated Skill in Text: 4.47/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 4.47/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 4.47/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 4.47/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 4.47/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 4.47/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 4.47/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 7.93/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 7.93/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 7.93/10 stars
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249 Won / 72 Lost
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2 Won / 2 Lost
 
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My critique isn't on the content. You need to get the fundementals (run on sentences, etc) dialed in. Like I've been saying it's real introspect, its hard to really 'judge' writing with that undertone. It's definatley edgy. i could imagine this as a Kevin Spacey dioaloge beginning/ending a movie.
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