Y~A, you have some good vocab, but never sacrafice the flow for the point of vocab. Get a strong flow going before you try to complex it up with vocab like that. There are some light ideas, but I think you will need to try hard to get the punchline game going strong. Red, I definently can see the elevation. The punchlines occur at every line, all you need now is to solidify them by continuing to work on their concepts, and work on the external stuff like exocusion, minimising filler etc. Overall, I have a winner with the harder verse, basicly. FV, Return it sometime guys.
dmullz won it for me in the first line. look dmullz had punches and shit while eth had broken multies and ok punches. as usual both lack vocab but dmullz pulled out a little stronger with the vocab. eth some of your concepts were confusing and your rhymes was a bit simplified. in the end one had more complex rhyme with wordplay. not really that great of a battle in my opinion but as always i kept it fair
You just pretty much repeated everything I said to you.
10 Year olds killing in the g-hetto these days?
Trolling is e-thugging?
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