[MYST]

Originally Posted by UnEtHiCaL

This isn't your best Stephen. You think it's your best because of your multie length and your vocab, but you sacrafised some origionality and creativity. I don't know how you start writting your verse, but it doesent really seem too punchline based. The way you want to do it is...

blah blah blah like *MAIN MULTIE*

Thats the most basic, and easiest to master technique. A simple metaphore set up, and although it won't be winning you awards, it lets you get a grasp on the whole idea better, and lets you solidify your concepts and ideas, which will help you in later styles.

Example (Askari's example to me 07 style)

Spray your block like a CAN OF DEODERANT.

Simple punchline here. I suggest getting it all broken down into a basic style like that before writting off of it.



This brings us to the multies. Here, you have so little rhyming in amoungst the big ones, and it forces the flow completley. Keep them basic enough. 4 syllables is plenty for a multie, and very little people are impressed by lengthy ones. Have your punchline developed, then play a couple of multies off it to get the flow going. I actually found a receint tactic, that although isn't working for me (0-4 in last 4 outings smfh), I do believe it is a better style when you are struggling to have small punches coming from the main multie. Just simply put one or two fillerish multies in for the purpose of flow, but do not break off to a completley different line.

Eg.

WASN’T IT MON-EY???? This TEENS STUPID, READ USELESS!! I just answered the “question” you no match to me, i’mma KEEN STUDENT!!!

This line could simply be...

This TEENS STUPID, READ USELESS!! I just answered the “question” you no match to me, i’mma KEEN STUDENT!!!

The first multie only makes the line longer, yet serves no purpose what so ever. If you trim every line as such, you will have space for another punchline at the end, and punches win battles.

Hope I helped.

The EtHaTrOn

nicely explained by the ethster!!

[MYST]

Originally Posted by UnEtHiCaL

This isn't your best Stephen. You think it's your best because of your multie length and your vocab, but you sacrafised some origionality and creativity. I don't know how you start writting your verse, but it doesent really seem too punchline based. The way you want to do it is...

blah blah blah like *MAIN MULTIE*

Thats the most basic, and easiest to master technique. A simple metaphore set up, and although it won't be winning you awards, it lets you get a grasp on the whole idea better, and lets you solidify your concepts and ideas, which will help you in later styles.

Example (Askari's example to me 07 style)

Spray your block like a CAN OF DEODERANT.

Simple punchline here. I suggest getting it all broken down into a basic style like that before writting off of it.



This brings us to the multies. Here, you have so little rhyming in amoungst the big ones, and it forces the flow completley. Keep them basic enough. 4 syllables is plenty for a multie, and very little people are impressed by lengthy ones. Have your punchline developed, then play a couple of multies off it to get the flow going. I actually found a receint tactic, that although isn't working for me (0-4 in last 4 outings smfh), I do believe it is a better style when you are struggling to have small punches coming from the main multie. Just simply put one or two fillerish multies in for the purpose of flow, but do not break off to a completley different line.

Eg.

WASN’T IT MON-EY???? This TEENS STUPID, READ USELESS!! I just answered the “question” you no match to me, i’mma KEEN STUDENT!!!

This line could simply be...

This TEENS STUPID, READ USELESS!! I just answered the “question” you no match to me, i’mma KEEN STUDENT!!!

The first multie only makes the line longer, yet serves no purpose what so ever. If you trim every line as such, you will have space for another punchline at the end, and punches win battles.

Hope I helped.

The EtHaTrOn

nicely explained by the ethster!!