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Originally Posted by Manny Festo
plain and simple you make no sense with your random words thrown together and your punchlines also make no sense but you throw out 5 exclaimation marks like you just dropped a killer punch
here.........for example (and we've been over this before....i know)
!!!!! I’m SONNIN’ EM’ FUCKIN COVENENT SUCKIN to have you “used quicker” than GOVERNMENT FUNDING!!!!!
"i'm sonnin' em' fuckin covenent suckin"..............it makes absolutely no sense
"used quicker than government funding"........to my knowledge organizations who receive government funding don't use the money any quicker than any other money they have
and to top all that off, I'M SONNIN' EM' FUCKIN COVENENT SUCKIN (whetever that means) has 25 extra syllable thrown in before it can match GOVERNMENT FUNDING as a multi
and thats just one tiny little line i critiqued so you get the picture
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^^^absolutely agreed. multis are mad sloppy syllable wise but worst of all is it makes little sense - or at best its too stretched. Don't try so hard to come up with 18 syllable multis and focus more on a solid rhyme with decent structure. peace.