I am no longer exclusive...but i had already expo'd....for what its worth
IAF 7 Red Myst 7
IAF: opener had some serious awkward wording there in the first multi, punch was a decent concept, but not really played out well enough to hit hard. urninary tract infections concept was pretty clever, lead in was average though, NYT line wasnt coherent, as him being "red through" isnt really an attack; closer wasnt at all hitting hard. RED: opener had a decent concept, but the multies were off, interrupting the flow, and the punch could have been worded better for greater impact. i liked the Revenge of the Nerds line, lol...good personal. KY line was funny as shit, but agian, the wording and multies were way off, but comedic effect was nice as shit..closer had a nice personal, but multies were off. I can tell that either someone is working with you or you've been working on this yourself. your back to back multies are pretty tight, but then some are off...good improvement, man. OVERALL: lackluster from one, improvement from the other has these two meeting in the middle. close shit here. FVC Bitch
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