Originally Posted by RULE

We thought he’d turn down this callout, run aWAY N RETIRE ‘Now He Gon Get This Work, Thank God’ as if he PRAYED TA GET HIRED!

Decent set-up, flows nice, decent jab.

6 defenses with no ‘Burn Out’; think youre TAKIN IT HIGHER?

Wording on the set-up seems strange to me. Maybe i dont get the slang. 6 defenses with no burn out? you mean like 6 defense with no clear victory? The wording is too unnatural and hurts the bar imo. More than the fire reference helps.

watch ya old-puns-fa-Row ‘Go Up In Smoke’ coz now youre ‘PLAYING WIT FIRE’!

Bit of a soft punch. playing with fire as a punch is pretty basic. Feel like the first line was the hardest of the bar which is should never be really.

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burnout is a state of exhaustion: physical, emotional, (in this case, writing).

but yea you pretty much agreed with my assessment, thanks yo. this is dope

Originally Posted by RULE

We thought he’d turn down this callout, run aWAY N RETIRE ‘Now He Gon Get This Work, Thank God’ as if he PRAYED TA GET HIRED!

Decent set-up, flows nice, decent jab.

6 defenses with no ‘Burn Out’; think youre TAKIN IT HIGHER?

Wording on the set-up seems strange to me. Maybe i dont get the slang. 6 defenses with no burn out? you mean like 6 defense with no clear victory? The wording is too unnatural and hurts the bar imo. More than the fire reference helps.

watch ya old-puns-fa-Row ‘Go Up In Smoke’ coz now youre ‘PLAYING WIT FIRE’!

Bit of a soft punch. playing with fire as a punch is pretty basic. Feel like the first line was the hardest of the bar which is should never be really.

1/

burnout is a state of exhaustion: physical, emotional, (in this case, writing).

but yea you pretty much agreed with my assessment, thanks yo. this is dope