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Originally Posted by Aggo
Dys is just like his dad. His L's (his cells) are multiPLYING A LOT. Saw the sick old man kicking a vending machine IRONIC, I THOUGHT it DENIED HIM A POP. I yelled "please stop kicking the cans, sir", he fuckin DIED ON THE SPOT!
Background: just before this battle dysfunctional revealed to me that his dad had cancer. It was a low blow but bars y'know.
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Dys is just like his dad. His L's (his cells) are multiPLYING A LOT.
In my accent (or any i put on to try and make this work) i cannot find the SELL sound needed for the wordplay to work. Only sounds like: His Els. So straight away the bars in trouble.
Saw the sick old man kicking a vending machine IRONIC, I THOUGHT it DENIED HIM A POP. I yelled "please stop kicking the cans, sir", he fuckin DIED ON THE SPOT!
This is a perfect mix of a played concept, played wordplay, but good execution. Even though ive heard a million cancer / can sir wordplays the execution was very funny. The bar is very wordy so be aware of that in future. The humour is what pulle dthis off. Honestly this shouldnt of worked but props lol.
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Originally Posted by Seul
An I laugh AT YOUR ABILITY 'cause anything "You Spell Out" ain't "CASTIN NO WIZARDRY"! I got straps for any CAT WHO BELITTLES ME, it's a FACT, YOU'LL BE HISTORY when I "Stand Tall & Wave The Heat" like the "STATUE OF LIBERTY"!!
- This one's from an audio battle, but oh well it translates over to text decently enough.
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An I laugh AT YOUR ABILITY 'cause anything "You Spell Out" ain't "CASTIN NO WIZARDRY"! I got straps for any CAT WHO BELITTLES ME, it's a FACT, YOU'LL BE HISTORY when I "Stand Tall & Wave The Heat" like the "STATUE OF LIBERTY"!!
You can tell this is an audio bar cuz the flow is slick but is a bit fillerish for a text bar.
An I laugh AT YOUR ABILITY 'cause anything "You Spell Out" ain't "CASTIN NO WIZARDRY"!
an ok start, not sure it adds anything other than the fact that it rhymes.
I got straps for any CAT WHO BELITTLES ME, it's a FACT, YOU'LL BE HISTORY
Same feed as previous line, even though the flow if nice to me its just filler that could of been used for another punch.
when I "Stand Tall & Wave The Heat" like the "STATUE OF LIBERTY"!!
decent punch. but only decent. techincally the statue doesnt wave but i can let that slide. To me its more of a filler punch than a proper punch.