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**Shodan** · #5 02-09-2018, 11:27 PM

Eh. I wasn't really feeling either verse and I don't have much insight on them, so this expo will be brief compared to the ones I've dropped on the other battles this round.

Writer 6: This was alright, I guess. I'll admit that I don't quite understand the storyline. But execution-wise you had some horrible spots. In a lot of your multi sets, it was obvious you that wrote them just to continue the scheme, and they were incredibly forced. For example: what are Parched Beliefs? Did your heart pound violent, or did it actually pound violently? Just wondering. 5 out of 10.

Writer 15: I felt this verse was clearer than Writer 6's, both in terms of conveying its subject matter and its execution. Technically it was less complex, but the improved readability more than made up for it. The storyline was not only obvious, but you just had to end it with "oops I was on drugs," which at this point might as well be "And then I woke up." 5.5 out of 10.

MVGT: Writer 15

**Shodan** · 02-09-2018, 11:27 PM

Eh. I wasn't really feeling either verse and I don't have much insight on them, so this expo will be brief compared to the ones I've dropped on the other battles this round.

Writer 6: This was alright, I guess. I'll admit that I don't quite understand the storyline. But execution-wise you had some horrible spots. In a lot of your multi sets, it was obvious you that wrote them just to continue the scheme, and they were incredibly forced. For example: what are Parched Beliefs? Did your heart pound violent, or did it actually pound violently? Just wondering. 5 out of 10.

Writer 15: I felt this verse was clearer than Writer 6's, both in terms of conveying its subject matter and its execution. Technically it was less complex, but the improved readability more than made up for it. The storyline was not only obvious, but you just had to end it with "oops I was on drugs," which at this point might as well be "And then I woke up." 5.5 out of 10.

MVGT: Writer 15

02-09-2018, 11:27 PM	#5
Shodan <The Fire Nation> One Bar Champion The Fire Lord Ranked Audio Record 2 Won / 4 Lost Ranked Text Record 111 Won / 73 Lost Exclusive Text Record 3 Won / 6 Lost Join Date: Jan 2014 Voted: 35 audio / 1085 text Posts: 2,969 Mentioned: 1226 Post(s) Tagged: 61 Thread(s)	Eh. I wasn't really feeling either verse and I don't have much insight on them, so this expo will be brief compared to the ones I've dropped on the other battles this round. Writer 6: This was alright, I guess. I'll admit that I don't quite understand the storyline. But execution-wise you had some horrible spots. In a lot of your multi sets, it was obvious you that wrote them just to continue the scheme, and they were incredibly forced. For example: what are Parched Beliefs? Did your heart pound violent, or did it actually pound violently? Just wondering. 5 out of 10. Writer 15: I felt this verse was clearer than Writer 6's, both in terms of conveying its subject matter and its execution. Technically it was less complex, but the improved readability more than made up for it. The storyline was not only obvious, but you just had to end it with "oops I was on drugs," which at this point might as well be "And then I woke up." 5.5 out of 10. MVGT: Writer 15 __________________ I'm retired from LetsBeef. Spoiler for Ya Boi's Signature: Spoiler for My punches hit you like: Spoiler for GIF, courtesy of NOBLE: Spoiler for A wise man once said: "Wtf are yaw readin nigga this nigga dont even make ssince and have the niggas who comment be garbage but tryna give at vice i been in real battles for money and won i haven't seen not one hot verse on here accept maybe a couple yaw some fuckin haters o. Me i punch this nigga like a speed bag smoked boots" - space_dabree, discussing the outcome of his battle with Shodan. Spoiler for More words of wisdom: "Your iq is too low to vote on my shit. Grab ddthabeast, take some literacy courses, get hooked on phonics and come talk to me then." - Teeteegee, discussing a fair vote left which Shodan left on a battle of his. Spoiler for ILLoKWENT's declaration of love: "fuck off lil faggit.. before i tare your dick off , and shove it up your dads ass while your slut of a mom makes a home video documenting the whole situation as your sister masturbates to mozart.capeesh?" The first person to notice the existence of this line of text and PM me about it is entitled to 50 of the credits on my account. Let's see how long this stays undiscovered. - Added May 1, 2019 - EDIT: Good job Culture for finding this on May 11, 2019! Faster than expect. Prize now rescinded. Will remove this sometime... - ILLoKWENT, in response to a rhetorical question. Spoiler for More love from illokwent: "Because he lacks any form of maturity to do grown folk stuff... And u can quote me on that.." - Read, and then sigged.
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