This was beautifully written. The AABBA rhyme scheme was very pleasant to read and flowed elegantly. Very effective imagery and descriptive adjectives made the story beefy, yet easy to follow. The theme of hour verse was a very literally interpretation of the topic but with a slight twist of remorse and guilt. I thought it was clever in it's own way. I can't really find much to critique you on as I didn't expect to read anything like this. The only thing is the "simple uniform/ cuneiform" rhyme was a tad off (to me.) Good luck in the next round, sorry your opponent didn't post; albeit you would have more than likely won regardless.
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