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Unread 02-20-2017, 01:35 PM
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Default Wording issues

Most of you on here have the shittiest execution of concepts/ideas. No doubt, Ive seen some dope concepts used by some of the active battlers on here but most of them are useless if they aren't delivered properly.

Heres an example-

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" Fybre Optikz, you're just GAY AND A MORON, saying "Give me nothing but the D!" so here's your FAILING REPORT CARD; "
Besides it being filler, calling someone Gay and a moron is just awkward. The build up doesn't connect to the punchline and doesn't pack a concept in itself so its rendered useless/filler.

Secondly, if you're a text battler and still use terms like "whack, faggot, lame, trash, gay" and so on, just to complete your multi set, Its most likely filler and doesn't hold any weight.


Heres another example-

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i'll show em that this LAME'S NOT A TOUGH PUNK n have his "dawg come n pick up this dead weight" like i SPRAYED SHOTS in DUCK HUNT
The punchline is decent but would you really say that build up line as a regular statement to someone in person?

The thing is I picked those two bars randomly from two "top tiers" and if you guys are going to set an example for the noobs, avoid this BS.

Yall need to chop your bar down and revise it as much as you can, before you post it. Don't force shit because in the end it would just make your bar look sloppy as fuck.

Honestly Eth and Esso have some of the cleanest wording and execution stringed with creative concepts amongst the active battlers at the moment. But if youre sacrificing your execution or wording for creativity or vice versa, it would just make your bar average at best.

That is all.

Last edited by Thug Killaa; 02-20-2017 at 01:41 PM.
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Unread 02-20-2017, 01:35 PM   #1
 
Thug Killaa
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Estimated Skill in Text: 0/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 0/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 0/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 0/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 0/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 0/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 6.9/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 6.9/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 6.9/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 6.9/10 stars
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Default Wording issues

Most of you on here have the shittiest execution of concepts/ideas. No doubt, Ive seen some dope concepts used by some of the active battlers on here but most of them are useless if they aren't delivered properly.

Heres an example-

Quote:
" Fybre Optikz, you're just GAY AND A MORON, saying "Give me nothing but the D!" so here's your FAILING REPORT CARD; "
Besides it being filler, calling someone Gay and a moron is just awkward. The build up doesn't connect to the punchline and doesn't pack a concept in itself so its rendered useless/filler.

Secondly, if you're a text battler and still use terms like "whack, faggot, lame, trash, gay" and so on, just to complete your multi set, Its most likely filler and doesn't hold any weight.


Heres another example-

Quote:
i'll show em that this LAME'S NOT A TOUGH PUNK n have his "dawg come n pick up this dead weight" like i SPRAYED SHOTS in DUCK HUNT
The punchline is decent but would you really say that build up line as a regular statement to someone in person?

The thing is I picked those two bars randomly from two "top tiers" and if you guys are going to set an example for the noobs, avoid this BS.

Yall need to chop your bar down and revise it as much as you can, before you post it. Don't force shit because in the end it would just make your bar look sloppy as fuck.

Honestly Eth and Esso have some of the cleanest wording and execution stringed with creative concepts amongst the active battlers at the moment. But if youre sacrificing your execution or wording for creativity or vice versa, it would just make your bar average at best.

That is all.

Last edited by Thug Killaa; 02-20-2017 at 01:41 PM.
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