Some of the wording felt a little bland or repetitive. Example: despite - spite. I know it's two different words with two different meanings but the spelling similarity throws it off. That'd be like rhyming see and sea. Y'know. Just sounds weak when it falls off the tongue. The piece was short and sweet. You've obviously got potential. Just think you need to revise your shit before posting it so that you can make the wording smoother / crisper. Looking forward to reading more, longer pieces from you.
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