The piece was decent. On the good side, For the most part you had a very nice rhyme scheme and flow was flawless, I thought you slipped away from that a bit at the beginning of your confession and then got back into as it went on from there. So the wording for the most part was decent. On the other side, I thought you really only went into one part of the quote. You brought in the "a guilty conscience needs its confession" but you didn't tie in that a work of art is a confession. Its one quote as a whole, so it all had to be connected and tied into the topic itself. Make it all relevant and be creative with it. There is a battle up right now with this topic that I voted on and gave feedback too. This is a great topic to think outside of the box and be creative with.
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