Some Feedback.
 

What am I missing? Like I see it, I just can pin point where to fix it. I need to perfect my verse more and many my execution smoother. justtttt ehhh


http://www.letsbeef.com/battle_detai...n=tb&id=397640

I keep reading over my current one with may.. I know what im missing, i just can't fix it

damn man... u soundin like me rite now. lol

haha shit... Well if im gonna keep moving on in the tourney.. I need to not have slip ups

TBH I think that verse was very good, Props for posting this thread. I think with letsbeef It's a lot to do with reputation as well as the verses, If you keep posting consistantly with this quality you'll probably get a bigger buzz and start beating the top names...

Thanks Urban I feel yah. I just feel like there is something missing.

Dno maybe you just need to find your text swag a bit (Laugh all you want)....but everyone has there style. Only fault I could really pick was the "(Yep!)" or whatever it was just wastes letters, and Guinness and Genius sound nothing a like (In a british accent anyway)...

yeah guess you have to mispronounce a bit lol

Yeah I dno, wordplay is such a odd thing in text anyway because everyone pronounces different and has different accents so I tend to just assume that it's correct nowadays unless it's blatently not correct like coffee/banana. I see some wordplay that sounds nothing a like but noone will comment on it..

yeah thats definitely true

And yet I've lost battles in the past because my wordplay doesn't make sense.....Swings and roundabouts