Help (Round 2)
 

So, After Reading Eth's, Core Souls And Manny's Comments (Appreciated), This Is What I Came Up W/. I Followed Eth's Idea Of Just Focusing On The Ending Punch (In Other Words). So, I Came Up W/ A Simple 1 Minute Thought Of Concept. I Tried To Keep It, How Should I Put It ........ "Not Talking Bout Myself", And Focusing More About The Opponent's Verse.

Anyway, I CAN DO BETTER.

everytime he think he feelin high, thinkin he in the sky is actually when he TRIPPIN ON SHOE-LACES!!!/

Holla. :cool:

I Changed It, Thought Of A Better One.

wayy too basic

are you trying to do inner-multis ?

i don't get your flow at all

Not intentionally. But i'onn't understand how it is basic???? It's/would be the concept i'd be working off.

how can someone be feeling high when they trip on their shoe laces?

besides that , it didnt fucking make sense what does shoe laces rhyme with ?

you should have said i always lose im never slippin on defeat, unless im trippin on shoe-laces
or sum of that nature

dude work on just the punch.

A easy simple way is to take a very simple gangsta posturing and turn it into a insult.

Really simple like...

He wouldnt "Raise Heat"...
He aint "Deep In The Hood"...
Dude wouldnt "Spark A Flame"...

^All these are very very simple easy to do punch set-ups. The more creative ending the better. ^This shit wont work against anyone half decent but is a good starting point.

Like...

I'll put "Heat To Your Temple"... like EGYPTIAN SUNRAYS!!! (Egypt has a lot of temples, hence the punch.)

So start off simple. In fact i'll write 3 set-ups, you make the punches..

1) dude wouldnt "Hold Heat"...
2) He couldnt have "Sick Words"...
3) Only time this "Bitch's Fresh?"...

^End those 3 and see what you make.

One Sec One Sec .... Its Just A Concept, I Haven't Done The Line Yet. I Am "Working Backwards".

And It Makes Sense. You Just Gotta Get It. When You "High", You Are "Trippin" ... But The Whole Punch About It Is That He Thinks He High When He Trips On His Shoe-laces, Cos When You Trip Cos Your Shoe-laces Are Untied, The You Face Up And You Fall ... Get The Picture??? :D

I'll put "Heat To Your Temple"... like EGYPTIAN SUNRAYS!!!

That's The Type Of Thing I Wanna Leave W/ At Least Before The End Of The Week. It Connects Like A Bloody Dick W/ A Vagin. :)