i need your help.. really bad guys.
 

Hey guys. very important post here. i recently cut ties with my girl and shes been running a smear campaign against me. ive been in a very low place lately and im trying to turn her hate into love energy here is the release " DBM ECLIPZE - PUDGEY BOY (PROD. ENEMY) " : - please leave a like if you like and a comment i really really need it right now i need all the support i can get

self-deprecation is usually the worse way to "sell your idea" or "get back at someone". If done sparingly or in the right way (i.e., with humor) it could work. But most people and especially girls, don't want to hear it. And it only diminishes your standing and points. No one gives a fuck what a loser says.

the track overall and the sentiments behind it are good, though. i'd go back to the drawing board, make it more of a diss on behaviors she displayed. Ones that most women would agree with you about. add a little self hype. with a funny line or 2 that are self-deprecating. like right in the jump. Maybe, admit to a lessor flaw in a funny way. that will lead into a diss.

coz the song, sounds decent, flow is cool, and i like the concept. but its uncomfortable to listen to you call yourself a rapist and stuff. you're definitely talented enough to redo this properly.

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I listened to 13 seconds and could already tell everything she said was true.

LOL

If I was a Mod I would’ve removed this simply for the amount of cringe.