Poetic Justice
 

Bar 1

With words I incorporate, defining thou glamor
for shining enamour that I have for you, please don't say adieu
I'm rhyming in honor

You lit my heart in a darkness, I think living warmer
feeling amorous, in this room with your memories
screaming in slammer

Pain paints picture perfect, thou'se my subject
we live in a different world though, these lines keeps us connect
me-taphors chain you in a paper, when I rain you turn me vapor
in hurdle heros never escape a... fie...ld

once he embrace his path, problems deface in math
never fail to protect you coz thou'se the mistress I have
your melodious rhythm echos ma cell
the same rhythm induce say to excell
I've been passing everytest when the beat say

Poetic justice poetic justice
Path that I've chosen to walk through, out my life I must lead
For a long time romance in chair, sometime in a bed
I love to see thou dancing hair, along time it cascade

Hooks../....

Bar 2

Your lips are so succulent its sweetness, making me immortal,
Feel like aphrodite blessed you, I keep surfing your portal,
I love the way whenever we quarrel, Its coz your just a mean
Who's stuck to me like a jean, the way I'm expressing these morals !

Playful like a child, violent/*** like a baby mother
Shy like a crystal at night, dear/*** you're my lady lover
Fear not to say me further, I'll/*** always give you cover
like you're my pre-si-dent I stay active like a chopper

A passion blows like a winds above sea level
Travel through across continent but still its stable
Please don't judge my emotions, its abyss Like a submarine in ocean
I'm delving in thou notion, Rhyming on my portion

I hate when I see you stuck in a writer block !
Lets have a lighter talk, So I could let my right ta walk
Meet me at your crib, don't cheat ya won't defeat
unless we unite our love, unite our love

---------- Post added at 12:30 AM ---------- Previous post was at 12:29 AM ----------

@EtH @Revan @Huey

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Some deep shit right there, @Eye G. Gets pretty choppy in a few spots, but the imagery and concepts are quite nice. I'm feelin' it. Just try and get that flow a little more smooth, and your rhymes a little less forced. Shit'll get real hot.

Respect,
'Preme

@Suprèmé; Thanks mate I really appreciate it !!

@EtH where is you dawg ?? Would appreciate your feedback..

Really deep piece right here. Love the story telling aspect of topical reads. This piece was a little choppy in places, but overall another fine piece. Good work.

This right here is dope bruh! especially the poetic aspect of it and the imagery was powerful, in other words this is a deep and excellent piece of writing fam

Thanks guyz I really appreciate ya'll feedbacks..I'm gonna scrutinize it again..

Reply to that battle I sent you ...

@X-Calibur done mate .. G'luck...