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Dono wins via 3-0 KO
Dono (DPS) vs K w0n (ACs) Illmania III Topical Battle House rules apply, contact me with any questions. The line limit for this topical battle is 40-60 lines. (Any adjustments must be decided upon by both participants and confirmed by Verity within 24 hours). Check ins are due by Thursday (9th August) by 11.59 GMT. Verses are due by Sunday (12th August) by 11.59 GMT. Seeing as this is a competition of the best crews from around the site, I have given both battles a very fitting topic; The 2012 London Olympics! Contestants have 24 hours to contact me via this thread if they agree this image should be replaced, you will only get one chance. http://i1094.photobucket.com/albums/...ympics2012.jpg First to 5 or 3-0 K.O. Voting Rubix Rhyming Scheme/Flow Vocabulary Topic/Meaning Storytelling/Progression Emotion Imagery Poetic Techniques Ending |
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Damn I wish I could have done this topic! Dope!
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Checkmate!!
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http://i1094.photobucket.com/albums/...ympics2012.jpg "The Runner" Pop! Pop! Fireworks arched high above, raining colors Over the giant Olympic stadium containing wonders A rare, almost eerie silence filled the space between blasts Seemed fast, for only a few minutes did the scene last She stood in the middle; trim, fit, mighty athletic Her curves ran in ways that were highly aesthetic She was afraid, her stomach full of butterflies This girl was such a prize to watchful, other eyes It was her first time doing any event as such Standing in a place she knew she wasn't meant to touch She didn't earn the spot, dodged her competitors' patrol But she was ready to run like messengers of old Could she keep pace? That would be her defining instance Finding distance to stay ahead with a blinding quickness Frantic thoughts exploded in her mind like thunder breaking Poor performance would prove her illegal undertaking Only one man knew of her true criminal action It was he who helped her create this livable passion, Made the visuals happen, and she loved every moment Fear and pleasure mixtures made the memory potent Flowing energy opened, their attraction palpable Between love and lust, clothing unfastened casual They gazed into each other's eyes as they exchanged glances Then suddenly: sirens - both hurriedly changed stances Awkward and clumsy as strange dances, they dressed and sprinted Now was her time to run, exactly the test predicted They ran across the empty openness with tired smirks Of course the police had noticed the fireworks Luckily, the man knew many shortcuts and secrets He worked there, visits to this fortress were frequent He promised her something great, so they snuck in late But he raised the stakes ten-fold and started shoving fate Bleachers seemed endless and without a single resident She felt as nervous as if she had seen the president Told her to wait as he prepared an amazing surprise Chasing supplies to create brightness like a blazing sunrise Activated a portion of the pyrotechnic display Automated, they watched the flaming majestic ballet As he held her tightly, their lips pressed close together And they let loose with each other in hopeful pleasure The arena filled with officers, shouting, searching Scouting, cursing, frustration increasing; howling, lurching They hadn't found anyone or anything suspicious Based on evidence, the culprits were fictitious With no leads, it was blamed on automation breakdown And the couple enjoyed other exciting nights in their great town |
"From Start To Finish"
I FLOW WITH CONSISTENCE so like “Rupp” I am GOING THE DISTANCE and I am ’the crowd’s favorite here’ so you KNOW IMMA WIN THIS. Let’s have a “Moment For Silence” as I put this ‘GUN INTO THE SKY’ and begin CONFESSING TO YOU, SEE? What’s DEPRESSING AND GLOOMY is that she FUCKS ANOTHER GUY!! The ‘funny thing’ is she's “not exhausted” after constantly ‘RUNNING THROUGH MY MIND‘!! FUCK IT, SHOULD I CRY since my “self-esteem is low” and SOMETHING I’D DEMISE!? [gun fires] **Race Starts** I'd like to 'tell a tale' but I aint TATTLIN YO and on some RANDOMNESS THOUGH I'm a HANDSOME KID SO I'm earnestly spewing. I'll have 'skeet shooting' on ya girl's 'teeth, boobies, ASS AND HER NOSE!! *Squirts* I go to SLEEP AND THESE HEATHENS keep on GRASPING MY SOUL and AXING MY THROAT as their 'spear hits' 'air/heir in the sky/in disguise' like a JAVELINE THROWN!! But BACK TO THE STORY I was on 'weed and liquor' but you may as well "SCRATCH OUT THE FOURTY" I'm COLLAPSED ON THE BOARD SEE and there's this fine black bitch so I'm CHATTIN WITH SHORTY but she HAPPENED TO BORE ME cuz she claims she used to do GYMNASTICS--A POOR TEASE. I was DASTARDLY HORNY and realized she put some 'low-life backstabbing' BASTARDS BEFORE ME!!{took me a while but I got there.LOL} So, she's SPEAKING WITH DUDE-N I heard him 'discus/discuss' something about having 'shots put' in a nigga when SQUEEZING THE TOOLS..psh..Bitch, I'm CEASING THE BULL IT/"bullet" has "nothing to do with me" so I aint BLEEDING FROM "FULL CLIPS"!! FairyTales...If he 'test I/eye' like OPTICAL TREATMENT, I'll be BEATING THIS LIL BITCH; fists MEETING HIS MULLET!!! Then, LEAVING THIS FULL SPLIT plus WE WAS COOL FRIENDS and now she got us fighting I'm not BELIEVING THIS CRUEL CHICK!! Alas, she EASILY FOOLED US he told me he seen her 'Eaton at Hardees' like the DECATHLON CHAMPS at the RESTAURANT AMPED with another dude on his 'LAP' IM LIKE "FAM, she's wrong but on SECOND THOUGHT, DAMN.." *Pause* "Her ASS IS LIKE BAM!" LOL. I'd like to have her 'legs bent like Gabby Douglas' while her BACKS ON THE GROUND!! Lolz. She has a PASSION FOR DWEEB DICKS. SMH. He said "I would never jump to conclusions to hurt you/hurdle baby cuz I'm no ALLYSON FELIX.“ TBH, I think you all's relationships are as ‘unstable’ as BAD PARAPLEGICS. Haha... You should 'sock her' bro, not for KICKS OR JOKES from WOMEN'S SOULS/soles (soccer). Kw0n is SPITTIN DOPE with PERMISSIVE FLOW. No SHITIN THOUGH...fuck the London Olympics and the CHICK'S A HO! Hahaha... FORGET IT YO. One night I woke up 'clean and jerking' like the IRANIAN HERCULES. (just playing) *talking to the girl now* Ya LIES BASICALLY HURTING ME!! You said you 'loved me' but fail to show it. I'll TRY PHRASING THIS PERFECTLY... You’re a beautiful girl and we would be ‘unstoppable’ like the U.S. BASKETBALL TEAM.. But are you “right for me”? Because I’m prepared for LUBE SEX. FABULOUS FOR ME!! Haha… Since you HAPPEN TO BE ‘flexible’ like the Chinese when we SMASHING IN THE SHEETS best believe I'll be RUDE, YES. No MATTRESS IN BETWEEN but I'm CLASHING IN THEM CHEEKS!! Lmfao! I'm MAD AS SHIT cuz HALF MY SHIT is "dragged" like ACTING ON TV!! I‘m living “life in the fast lane” like USAIN BOLT so YOU CANT HOPE to end my PRIDE AND SHAME but I’m FIGHTING BABE and you’re “all I want” so you can’t tell me I don’t deserve 'your honor' I’m not TYSON “GAY“!!! EXPOS -Rupp is the 5000m champion. -Everyone knows a gun is fired in the air before a track event starts. -Javelin Throw is a Field Event. -Skeet shooting is an Olympic Event, too. Skeet can also mean sperm haha. -I said “SCRATCH OUT THE FOURTY” and there is no 40m run in the Olympics and you should know what happens when you scratch too many times in a Track & Field Event-- EJECTION! -Discuss and Shot Put are Field Events. -Eaton and Hardee were the top two American Decathlon athletes. -Gabby Douglas is the Gold Medalist Gymnast. -Allyson Felix is the Women’s Hurdle Champion. -Clean and Jerk is also an Olympic Weightlifting event. -The Iranian Hercules is the Gold Medalist Weight Lifter. -The Chinese are great in Gymnastics and Diving. -Everyone knows Usain Bolt and Tyson Gay was an American in the same race (100m Sprint) but didn’t receive a medal. P.S. and I'm not gay. :pimp: |
Ok 2 different styles here
Dono your shit was cool..... like the metaphor or not even that but how you revealed the plot had me thinking one thing at first then another..... didn't like end much shit flowed well for a quick concise read was paced nicely like i said just wasnt feeling the ending like once i realized they was just fucken i kinda smiled but was like "oh" but cool verse i can dig it KF Ok this is not conventional at all, but i can look past that, this is a keystyle? I mean theres just really nothing but bars I see how you intergrated oylmpic themes but it was awkward at parts some was good some hits an misses as far as cyphers go... i dunno know what this is i mean u go from spitting bars to a story i guess some dialoge i wasn't feeling much... think you need to shorten your lines up some get your flow a lil tighter an work on plot development v/ Dono |
I had dono edging or solidly taking every catagory of the voting rubix. Thats not to say i didnt enjoy kwon verse as well, dono is just more polished in this field and gets my vote.
Vote: Dono |
I enjoyed both. I think Kwon's approach was different, but I can live with it. Overall, I'll base my judgement on which verse puts me into the picture more, which is what the topical is based on. I'ma have to go with Dono on this one. If I look at the picture and heard your two verses, his puts me more into the scenery so I think he did a better job in that respect.
Vote: Dono |
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