I got a question...Educated battlers only
 

is a verse like this worthy of a 5?

Since dudes still trash this'll be an easy win. Boots,sigs,mask clips filled? Bitch that's medium. If I was going hard id show no regard. Poke then scar ya throat with swords. Choke this broad till them vocal chords Violet Boregard(Willy wonka). I'll swing a bat man. Then aim, point when that sig smoking either you'll die or end up with Banes voice.(cigarette smoke)...rebel flow destroy ya. Puns delahoya. Dumb ass, one pump blast leave you looking disgusting as fuck like an episode of hoarders. goons run through ya place swarming. Take you to the top balcony watch "get air over the rail" but you ain't skate boardin.


---BUT IF I HAD IT LIKE THIS I WOULD GET 10'S...

ain't shit changed. *sigh*

Wordplay is there. Multis are there. Puns are there. Flow is def there. LB will never improve until people get smarter and learn how to properly read a verse. Also, the forced trash I see these days ain't hot. If it wouldn't be ill spoken aloud, then it's NOT COOL.

More like a low 7 tbh

I'd give that verse a 3. Real talk.

shits meh but 5's a little low, by normal standards then yeah it's "not bad" but by lb standards atleast it's copmpitant and clean

lmaooo. :cmonson:

i would honestly rate it at 7, maybe 8. but i've seen worse get 10s. it was keyed regardless so idgaf but people still don't know how to comprehend buildups and comparisons to things(punches) in verses.

why you laughing? lol

a 5 = not bad. and that was a verse of aimless filler with a wack punch at the end.

a 3.

i counted more than 1 punch

Name them.

lol at the status

Aimless filler. hmm. let me break this shit down for you bro lol

Since dudes still trash this'll be an easy win. Boots,sigs,mask clips filled? Bitch that's medium.

Ok opening line. No punch, just kinda an intro with good flow and multis.

If I was going hard id show no regard. Poke then scar ya throat with swords. Choke this broad till them vocal chords Violet Boregard(Willy wonka).

Multi flurry. Choking someone till their throat turns blue. PUNCH. and clever wordplay


I'll swing a bat man. Then aim, point when that sig smoking either you'll die or end up with Banes voice.(cigarette smoke)...

Bat man is referring to the Movie batman. The sig iis slang for gun. Banes voice is raspy like what happens to cigarette smokers. smoke is also a slang term for kill. good multis and flow as well as wordplay and PUNCH.


rebel flow destroy ya. Puns delahoya. Dumb ass, one pump blast leave you looking disgusting as fuck like an episode of hoarders.

Again, good multis and flow. Hoarders homes are disgusting which is what someone would look like if I shot them. lol...again that's still a PUNCH.


goons run through ya place swarming. Take you to the top balcony watch "get air over the rail" but you ain't skate boardin.

*sigh* Good multis and flow. Skateboarders get air over rails on halfpipes. Which would be another PUNCH. so only the opener didn't really have a punch.

Weight is irrelevant as it's personal preference but they are still punches

lol @ dos rating his own shit like that.

you aint changed john. i'd love to live in your head haha.

do you son. no hate.

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I gave my shit a high 7/low 8. but it is alarming to me that even someone as respected as you couldn't see the puns simply because I didn't cap my shit. It's def no hate homie you know I fucks with you but you gotta admit when I'm right about something. lol

John you made my day. haha kudos brother.

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Yep you aint changed a bit fam haha. Good for you son.

Glad I could make your day lmao

For our eyes only

http://www.letsbeef.com/forums/showp...57&postcount=2

;)

damn i can't see it LMAO

hahaha

Corb is awesome. No lie.

I didnt even know we could do that haha.

lol all jokes

looking back on my old battles though...i've lost steam and kinda switched my style. aaaaand i don't put time and effort into my verses anymore. because i am much more interested in recording and performing.

It said: "John Dos is such a dippy cuntbag twat" - Just C.

I wouldnt take that shit if it were me mate...

lol. weren't we supposed to track battle ages ago? @Just C

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@RULE have you put out any new shit recently?

If you're more interested in recording and performing, don't get mad when people rate your shit low.

Nah my shits was wack anyways. My pen game was always my strong suit rather than my mic play.

You dropping a second tape soon?

lol it didn't he winding u up

Dont make me screenshot the shit JC.

@THUG Killer to thread.

hahaha dead

@RULE yea man I'm 6 tracks in on the new tape. totally different sound and style. i'm on my hippy shit lately. greatly infuenced by psychadelic drugs and pot. less mnainstream sounding. better beats.

@Just C hbu man? any new shit out?

Psychadelic drugs and weed.

So...it doesnt make sense?

no my shit makes sense but some songs can be perceived differently by different people. i try to speak in ways so everyone can relate to certain things i talk about. my beats are hittin' hard. i'm looking forward to finishing it.

That wasn't a hit to you, more so to shit like Beattles who people say are sooo genius...when really it makes fuck all sense :D.

If you're not a faggot between now and then I'll listen to it.

I fucks with the Beatles but I feel you though a lot of the songs people are really into, I don't really care for. "While my guitar weeps" or something like that. Eric Clapton never got the credit for playing lead guitar in that song

Since dudes still trash this'll be an easy win.
^Filler...has nothing in relation to the following line
Boots,sigs,mask clips filled? Bitch that's medium.
^Again, Filler.
If I was going hard id show no regard. Poke then scar ya throat with swords. Choke this broad till them vocal chords Violet Boregard(Willy wonka).
Each line in this is also filler fam. Also, the wording of the punch is bad "vocal chords Violet Boregard"...that's poor wording an a very weak punch. The "build ups" to this punch have nothing to do with it, it's self.
I'll swing a bat man. Then aim, point when that sig smoking either you'll die or end up with Banes voice.(cigarette smoke)...
Not THAT bad of a concept, but weakly executed. Don't see what "banes voice" is rhyming with either. If it was a "run on line" into the next one then it's keep the momentum of flow going, but it's not. It just stops dead there.

rebel flow destroy ya. Puns delahoya.
^Again, filler...they rhyme, but that's all...has nothing to do with the following piece(s)
Dumb ass, one pump blast leave you looking disgusting as fuck like an episode of hoarders.
^So far, your best line an it's holding no weight.
goons run through ya place swarming. Take you to the top balcony watch "get air over the rail" but you ain't skate boardin.
^Ok, best line in the piece. the wording on "The top balcony watch get"...thats fucked. Still, best line in the whole lot.



Overall, dude it was an extremely weak drop. Personally i'd give it a 3...4 if i was in a really good mood, an i'm never in a good mood lol. Keep at it though, gotta shake a lot of rust of Dose.

P.S. using CAPS as an excuse for not getting votes on a drop like that is seriously stupid, it was the content you put forth that warranted the rating of a Generous 5 (not bad).

I was one of the first guys on the "CAPS DONT MATTER" wagon, but then I realized what it was and why they are important.

On other sites, a line will work like this...

I'll tell you now sonny I've got bars and they're great,
So I'll hit the ground running like the arms of an ape.

#DosageSwag.

Writing like that, you know when to emphasise and expect a rhyme, at the end of the line. You dont need to emphasize the little internal rhyme, but the end one always had to be emphasised to create the exocusion. Because there are no clear lines in the LB battle box style, you actually dont really know when to emphasise the multi. That means the punch isn't delivered as well and the flow can get thrown off a bit.

...Core Soul i hope you remember losing to me 5 times bro.

AIM POINT was what rhymed with BANES VOICE.

imagery in lyrics is so under rated.

choking a bitch till theyre throat turns blue like violet boregard. that's fucking dope imo. crowds would go crazy if i used this in a live battle . you're delusional my friend.

How the fuck is that dope? That's like saying "I'll make your face turn red like super mario's hat".

Imagery in battling? Lmao. I'm the biggest fan of imagery when it comes to topicals, but in battling? Uhhhhh

just for fun I should purposely recycle and cap the multis. i bet alot of voters would be tossing 8s or better.

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if u said that mario shit with some swag and multis live it might not be that bad bro. lol