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IV 03-02-2012 01:13 PM

Dono vs _Axiom (Round 1) Dono wins
 
Dono vs _Axiom


House rules apply. Any questions, contact me.


Check ins are due Monday (March 5th) at 11.59PM EST
Verses are due Friday (March 9th) at 11.59PM EST


Line length; 20-60 lines
3-0 K.O or first to 5 votes

Your picture is from JAWS. Interpret your topic in any way you see fit!

http://i1094.photobucket.com/albums/...aws_00497H.jpg

Voting Rubix
Rhyming Scheme/Flow
Vocabulary
Topic/Meaning
Storytelling/Progression
Emotion
Imagery
Poetic Techniques
Ending

Dono 03-02-2012 08:49 PM

Cha, cha, cha check.

The Kid Eddie T 03-02-2012 09:45 PM

Check, but I'm confused, sending a battle or forum battle?

Dono 03-02-2012 10:19 PM

Forum battle, post your verse here.

IV 03-04-2012 11:50 AM

@_AxIoM you post your verse here in the thread :)

IV 03-09-2012 08:29 AM

@Dono @_AxIoM im extending this round til 11.59pm on Sunday, please drop your verses by then.

The Kid Eddie T 03-09-2012 02:21 PM

yeah illl start writing today. be done by tonight

Dono 03-11-2012 04:15 AM

http://i1094.photobucket.com/albums/...aws_00497H.jpg


The vast ocean is forever, an endless expanse
But I've done everything, there's no more advance
I'm tired, the daily routine takes too much effort
I've lived so very long, that doesn't take an expert
So how can it be that I've come to humanity?
You must think this an act of pure insanity
But I've encountered plenty boats and sailors
As I watched groggily, took notes of failures
They marvel at norms till they're gargled in storms
Or sometimes they see me and ogle in swarms
Viewed before, they called me an excellent specimen
I'm extra large, able to wrestle with the best of men
They'd often yell out, then throw down nets and harpoons
I'd have to destroy their boats just to get the buffoons
Being around this long? Not much gets you aggravated
A monster like me will sit serene, not animated
Happened enough lately though to make me agitated
Followed the next ship to new waters and acclimated
On arrival I found an easy target floating
Teeth gnashed, breathe fast, gave the water a scarlet coating
Waited days, there was no response, I made another round
You all suffer now, I took the son of a mother down
Heard the way these people respond to the slaughter.....wow
They yell 'shark attack, get out of the water now!'
But still nothing, no real retaliation in sight
All I've done is gain a reputation of might
Because of the incidents I'm getting growing fame
But really I could care less if people know my name
I understand perfectly what'll happen when I'm caught
You might think I'm upset and afraid? Well I'm not
I'm done, I'd like to end in a blaze of glory
Rip people to fleshy bits and leave their faces gory
Bash and lash, crash and smash, until I'm right to the breath
Where I cease living, a worthy fight to the death
It's not often you find a beast that hopes to die
But that's why I approach the beach mouth open wide
As I close in on another of my constant victims
I hope to make the time of my final conflict quicken

IV 03-11-2012 11:41 AM

@_AxIoM you have til 12 midnight tonight...

IV 03-12-2012 04:26 AM

@Dono wins via no show! Thanks for submitting, the next round should be an all-showing round so look out for when it starts! I will PM you feedback on your verse so it's not completely wasted. Thanks!

Hubert Cumberdale 07-31-2013 09:01 PM

Bump for formatting.


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