Okay little one, if you wanna "Expand as an Emcee" you can't jus say that you don't HESTITATE TO PULL THOSE TECH NINES, I must admit: "You're Growing Fast" but quit thinkin' you'a "HEAVYWEIGHT" W/ ALL THOSE "STRETCH'D LINES"!!!

Just one more bar, much respect.

this was aight fam...the concept prolly coulda been fleshed out into a stronger overall punched...turned out to be a dope way of saying someone's shit was stretched lol...maybe more outside of the box shit but this was pretty tight yo..

i mean...its alot that can be done with the concept of stretched lines

Thanks bro. It was an opener for a 32, so I thought it'd been best warm-hot, rather than fire-hot. I like an escalation in longer verses. I would have made that a bit bigger, but that's one of the most difficult schemes I've ever kept for more than one bar...

@Itz Killz


This Fag "Delivering Punches" Is Like Rebels BOMBING BOARDERS I'll Leave Him "Trapped In His Bars"Like AWNING QUARTERS And This Dude "Disabled Vet"Like VIETNAM SOLDIERS!


You Couldn't Make "Scornful Punches"If Your Were A PSYCHOTIC SWART It Like He Have "Concealed Eyes"He Misses The Punches Like His Vision Is MYOPIC PERT And He Couldn't Hit Me With "Lyrical Bolts"If He Was A MELODIC DART!

Was English your first language?

this was interesting..seems like you have some potential but dont quite grasp the language..for instance...if someone is delivering punches similar to bombing borders...those are some good ass punches..thats really a compliment...i'm not sure what awning quarters means, but i do know that Vietnam Soldiers is a mismatch in multi...whole line was pretty much filler

second one...well..i think you may need a dictionary..or shit..maybe i do...because i didnt grasp most if not all of it.

'BOMBS, HE's BRINGING THEM'?,
naaaaaah,
the only reason 'GOD's LIKELY STRAPPED'....
PUT BASICLY?..
cuz even the most 'STAUNCHEST CHRISTIANs'
WOULDN'T 'PAY TO SEE'
the 'ALLMIGHTY RAP'....

love the concept...the execution isnt bad either..but could be polished as far as the flow...solid swag...if anything, maybe instead of 'staunchest christian' maybe something that would put the reader more in the mind of a christian that was also a rap fan...but at this point thats just nitpicking..dope

Thanks......

"even if Moses was into hip hop..." lol