Very true.. the syllable emphasis was so weird in the third multi it must've fucked me up.

mastered the hand motions - a, _, _, a, ō
acting out hand holding - a, _, _, a, ō
Backing down, then bolting - a, _, _, i, ō
Cracking The Can Open - a, _, _, a, ō

To not stress the second and third syllables in your second and third multies was just being generous.. They should be "ē, ow" respectively. But yeah, regardless it stifled my reading enough to bother me.

I was never any good at school....
Thanks Phrox!

47 ewwwww Teach your killin me......


And just so we're all on the same page

Hammer -

a part of the action of a modern gun that strikes the primer of the cartridge in firing or that strikes the firing pin to ignite the cartridge

This is why I send the Hammer low

Kinda excited for my mark

Schnapp Can Be Pronounced Similar To Snap :http://www.howjsay.com/index.php?wor...&submit=Submit

Just Saying...And Ending Bar Was How To Make An Alcohol Beverage "Walk On The Moon"

and how can you say they didn't connect when all are alcohol based/related...?
:fail:

@~SHINIGAMI~

Can be pronounced =/= is pronounced.
Schnapps is of German origin, and has a soft a sound. They don't even have the "a" sound (hat, bat, cat) in their language. I speak it. I know what I'm talking about, and you do not.

Also, even beyond that, SNAP =/= SCHNAPPS for two more reasons. One: the latter ends with an "s". Two: the latter starts with a "sh" sound. It was wrong on three levels total.

For your bar relevance, you got a generous 7. Like I said, your concepts (ideas for your punches) didn't "connect" because there was nothing behind them.

"Bars Open" --> TAKE THE SHOTS
"heat sensation" --> bitter face as if they TASTED SCOTCH
PRO-SNAP/SCHNAPP --> "Punch" will give ya a "WALK ON THE MOON"

None of those examples are punches, they are just references to something else. It's like saying... You're gonna "take these shots" like you ordered some alcohol or I got "bars" like places where people get drunk. Both of those are concepts that deal with alcohol, but they are not punches. Say that in front of a crowd and you will get boo'd off stage immediately.


Going even further, here's that drink of yours:

2 oz blackberry schnapps
1 oz vodka
3 oz cola
3 oz milk

Milk and coke? No one drinks that shit. If you're going to make a reference to an alcohol, make it relevant to your audience.

@Path

Here we go again.. *sigh* kids doubting the teacher.

Let's break this down... look at the bold red text above. You have three different pronouns (your, him, her) two of which don't match: (him & her). You start by talking to your opponent by saying ur or your.. then you continue to talk to your opponent by saying em or him.. then when it comes time to flip your concept, you use the pronoun her, switching your target from male to female? Your wordplay was forced as fuck. Just because "liquor spot" and "lick her spot" are homophonic phrases as is doesn't mean they will make sense if you throw them into a bar without careful planning. That's mistake number one. Number two: Even if the him & her are different entities, who is the her? She hasn't been mentioned a single time throughout the entire bar. Is this some imaginative her? It still doesn't make sense. Number three: Relevance and setup. Let's pretend you didn't switch pronouns.. and the identity of who you were dissing was understood.. even then, how is the reader supposed to tie in the phrases "Italian Liquor Spot" with a football game that ended in a drunken brawl? You've said nothing in the bar that would lead the reader to assume that's what you were referencing. Nothing.

And on your Italians being great lovers thing.. if that's the subconscious reference you're trying to use to tie in licking spots with Italians, you need to use a better concepts, bro. Because when you read the bar, it just sounds very random. Very weird and random.

I think 'em, in Path's bars referred to "them" rather than "Him."

The expos stands, regardless, but, it just seemed. It wasn't clear.

I don't control the titles, yo.. I'm just trying to help people learn and answer questions. When you say shit like this:

When it doesn't, and I explain to you why it doesn't in several ways.. someone's doing the teaching and it isn't you.

smh.. if you don't want to learn, I can't help you. But, really.. go down faster than an Italian lick her spot. I doubt you even read what I wrote.. but really.. you and your friends think this makes sense? Faster than an Italian lick her spot? Say that out loud. Literally. Each word. You really think that makes sense as it stands? This semester is going to be rough to say the least.

What's the point of a "School" if all we do is question the instructors? We can either,
A) Teach the course ourselves.
or
B) Shake off what you don't agree with, take what you do.

@Path you are a piece of shit and imma bully you all semester i don't care if i get detention i dont care if i get expelled you will give me your fucking lunch money!

and by the way, Italian Lick her spot? .. come on son, come on
Lemme say that again..Italian lick her spot, Whatchu got to be mad about son that was the whackest wordplay in the thread and @Pheonix is in here, Lol

Path u might wanna listen to xen considering everything he said is bang on, and ANYONE that messaged you is complete and utter garbage and they can come in this thread and defend the "Italian Lick her spot" right now, Fuck outta here path we don't play that shit

lol @Path, read the syllabus , if you continue with this, you will be expelled bro, chill out. Pz/

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Its one thing to explain your bar, its another to bicker. if you feel your grade wasnt high enuff, do better next round. An Explanation is fine, but the way youre going about it will not be tolerated. This goes for everyone. im content with only having 5 people in class. If i have to expell 75 percent of you so be it. Chill n elevate.

Path did you go and hate vote on Xens battle because of his rate?.... One key to this school is building character... not hate voting ... not getting salty after a loss.... this is being looked into

Ait i looked into it, close battle so it wont be deemed as a hate vote. Pz

It COULD very well be deemed as one tho path... chill out... your expo about xens multis being off is 100 percent wrong....... tbh

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JD had more off multis that Xen..... but we wont sway the battle.

Omg path stfu with the little 5 word female comments, pull the tampon out your ass son you have ALOT of elevating to do

yes infact they do rhyme path, Bare-in-mind =3 syllables prePAR-IN-RHYMES= 3 syllables and Bear-dis-guise= 3 syllables are you that fucking retarded?

@Path

BARE-IN-MIND...
prePARIN-RHYMES...
BEAR-DISGUISE..
PARALYZE...

Do you know how to fucking read? I cap and dash multies for people like you.. who need it.

lol i was going to say the same thing... but yall beat me to it....

a-PPAR-EL-AND-OUT-FITS and CLER-ICS-IN-AUSCH-WITZ .. Path give it up hes plain and simple better then you and you should take his advice..

its starting to look like a hate vote...

Path you are a fair voter... and he doesnt have to cap or uncap, caps dont mean anything, I want to kick you for your stupidity, but im torn because this is school, and you are supposed to learn somthing, YOU ARE WRONG... if you are too stuborn to learn..... then I cant keep you around... this is your last warning...take a second to read this again...

Wtf do you mean try and make it fit that clearly does fit you fucking retard?
what doesnt fit about it? do you listen to rap this happens ALL the time, only reaosn you dont think it rhymes is cause he capped Pre?.. gtfo your a piece of shit and if you don't be a man and show that you know whats wrong, it infact makes you a bitch

@Path LMMFAOOOOOOOAHAEIUOBDGBAGIAB!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! So you thought by having the "pre" from PREPARIN-RHYMES capped that it's meant to be emphasized or something? Yeah, dude you don't know how to read. If anyone needs schooling, it's definitely you.

@Path admit you are wrong... and this will be squashed

yo @NOBLE , your fvc leader right? Can u please explain to me how someone as a 'fair voter' will vote against somebody because of this shit?.. thats why i don said all those fvc comps are stupid

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I think i would like to un-enroll rupt , obviously some people need WAY more schooling then me... LMFAO this actually made my fucking day

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yo @Path you should be banished from rap for this one

LMFAO , cya bro

Path, you're a worse troll than Lizman. Seriously.

You know what? get your "homies" in here RIGHT now to tell me your shits dope

I warned you. Not only did two teachers say you are wrong. So did your classmates... Im loving the class participation here. @FiNALWoRD will be givin an extra 5 points extra credit for class participation when his grade comes in

@Path is the first member of Rap School to be suspended. Reason being.... Inability to want to learn....Stubborness.... And continuing to bicker with teachers after being provin wrong.

I want you to excell Path, but you clearly have a problem you need to deal with first. You are FVC and i dont want you running around voting poorly on peoples battles so you wont be expelled you will be givin a 2 week suspension. I want you to learn... We want to teach you... If a spot is open after your 2week suspension you are more than willing to join us.

pz

got me some teachers pet marks haha, Peace out path you deserve every minute of this suspension and tbh if u still think ur right i hope you lose fvc because son.. wow

I am not over FVC, but i can say we dont need votes like this running around. I believe @Path needs some schooling after this and also Fair voters arnt supposed to hate vote and this is clearly a hate vote @NOBLE . IMO he should be removed and you should find a replacement.

Yea im cold, so like A GLOVE OR SOCK AT NITE, ill SHOVE THA GLOCK IN TIGHT, blast so hard we’ll c ‘g shittin beams – so take ur pre written schemes’ to ANOTHER FUCKIN SITE!
-Path

I call hate vote

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I've asked him before to be fvc @Erupt .. i think i'd be the perfect replacement

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A-glove-or-sock-at-night Shove-tha-glock-in-tight 'C g shittin beams, prewrttien schemes' A-nother-fucking-site... God damn path

Ok final lets leave Path alone ... lol


the rest of the grades will be in today....

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******Two spots have opened and...... @Dissizit and @GRizzEAT have been added to the class starting next week! Welcome to both of you! ******

Can't wait. I'm anxious for mines. Be hard on me. No homo aha

Where Can I Sign Up? I Want To Be A Student Too!

Aight thanks for the breakdown @Phroxen

I've got a lot to work on, already knew that.

Im looking into one of the classmates to check for his activity levels, there might be one spot opening up if want to start next week.. the the amount of students in the class stops at 15.

@Path What you doing bro take criticism and move on you looking foolish ya bar wasn't good now make it better don't bitch about it bro .. phro rhyme was good no need to look at him differently because you're being judged just do better thats all ... thats the point of this thread to get better .

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Yeah me & @GRizzEAT are the cool kids that came to school mid month and take shit over ... yall suspended my bro @Path but he gonna be back soon better than ever ! ... lol