Nah the reviews were in point tbph. Keep it up. It's always nice to read an in depth, educated, un biased view. I co sign this thread and it's movement. Leave the lying and the dick riding to the track side. No offence to those people who read this. But I'd rather get a Huey review than a million "fire" comments on my track any day of the week.

i actually enjoyed the reviews and agree with them.

dick riders

yeah yall are a bunch of faggots

new rule, you had to have posted a track and gotten a review before you can hang in the play house..

Here's a real effort. Red Myst made the beat and I mixed it myself, which I haven't really done much of before.


If you're still not feelin it then feel free to delete this out the thread as well and I'll stay out for good. Take it easy.

all i ask for is effort

BEAT hahaha yo this shit cracked me up from the first note. this shit was like the sex scene in an 80s sci fi film. with that said, i loved it...

PERFORMANCE man you were chasing the beat the whole time. i didn't hear you sit inside the pocket of this beat once. and your voice drops out a lot makes it hard to hear you. and the last syllables you say in your lines just drift off into space more often then not. 'fightin onnn'. just holding that onn a little bit too long (just one example. another example, whats 'rigght or wroongg') it makes it sound like your searching for the beat. a great performance would be a performer that knows the beat so well they effortlessly sit inside it, as if unaware of it (coming out of the rhythm whenever but always coming right back in). that kinda performance makes it sound like the beat was crafted around the lyric. your performance had the opposite effect

PRODUCTION no good, the second you start rapping this shit gets waaay to cluttered. im realizing this beat isnt great to rap on, its too busy. you didn't really have anywhere to go, may attest to your forced performance. your vocal also is flat, eq that shit. figure out what aspects of your voice you want to accent and eq it higher or lower.

LYRIC the lyric was actually great. i feel bad you wrote such a great lyric for a song that really didn't work out. probably got pumped when u put that on paper... BUT. im speaking about your words. your words were good. rhythmically this lyric is preeeetty bad


OVERALL this beat is hilariously dramatic. so much so that i would enjoy it as just an instrumental. just like i would enjoy your lyric if solo, on paper. these two things combined made one nasty musical cluster fuck peppered with flat, forced vocals. the ingredients were good, the cocktail was gross. 4

im playing in the play house with postin a track, What now? :o

lemme know

BEAT lol this shits raw.. the intro sample makes an instant classic

PRODUCTION great, the beat is a lil muddy but your voice cuts it perfect. (btw im listening to all these tracks on dre beats)

PERFORMANCE major swagger, and still believable. you bodybagged this shit no doubt

LYRIC lots of it, but shit was cool throughout. boss bars for the boss song. only thing id say is the lyric went on for a loong time so it got kinda stale... i'd cut that shit up with a movie sample or a hook or something, keeps it fresh. movie sample would sound raw on that beat though

OVERALL killt it. no complaints besides shit got a little long winded in the second half. if u split that song up with some shit in the middle id have no complaints. regardless, this shit was easily the best song in this thread thusfar i give it an 8.5.

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[QUOTE=Phil Banks;797080]
lemme me know the order of verses

its stot me sleeze and sly that order

BEAT super bang haunt fest. shit knocks

PERFORMANCE

STOT murdered it, hits the drop major. fit the beat really well, great start to the track. accent sounded a lil fake at points though

PHIL BANKS your wording is a lil weird, you were doin a bit of what Dono was doin. stretching out words to fit the beat then pushing words together to get back into the beat. made it sound like u were reading, anticipating the next word rather then chillin on the shit your sayin atm. it was a decent performance but it was outshined major by stots opening

Steeze this dudes voice plus this beat is raw as fuck. fits it perfect. his adlibs were a lil much at points but at other parts the stereo adlibs were dope, he shoulda put some of those on everyones verse.

Slypro another ill voice for this beat. this dude was eatin this beat soundin a lil bit like scarface. rhythm got a lil bit awkward but never too awkward. another ill verse

HOOK cool hook, tied everyones verses together bout their women. but with these real authentic hood ass accents comin into the track kinda exaggerates stots seemingly forced accent. like he's trying too hard or something. not that your bein a fake, stots voice just didnt hit as hard after hearing the later verses. maybe if each person rapped the hook after their verse that coulda been cool.

PRODUCTION great, the bass pumped, the snare cracked, the vocals cut. good job. i thought the quality difference in all these verses was going to bug me since u all probably used ur own home studios but they all melded surprisingly well.

LYRIC you all killed it by staying on topic. thank you. thats what made the song, everyone telling stories about their women n shit

OVERALL this song was great. the production was good enough to where the song can get bumped, the lyrics were all on point, the performances and different swaggers were all unique and entertaining. in regards to you phil banks, since u posted it, i gotta say you probably had the weakest verse on the track. not to say you were wack, but you got outshined. but since this song was more topical than boasting it didn't really matter, it works as a whole rather than individual performances. had a hook, it had everything. imma give it a 8

@Gurp Da God you say im off beat??? every rhyme word is on the snare.... that means i'm on beat... cept for the cut in line part.... don't really get what ya mean... i actually thought this was the most comfertable I was on any beat...

"buully cats", "still be dooinn that". some parts you hit, other parts you fell off. your breathin was awkward, the performance just wasn't great man. thats just my opinion though

pronto banks track illl!!

Changed my mind, scratch that.

good times

Edit:
Instrumental: Angels produced by JuJu.

Mixing: BLNK.