2013 GC: RD1 - Enfinite Vs FREAK_MC ~RRR~ - (Enfinite Wins 3-0)

Enfinite: I thought the concept was dope, but one little thing got to me. You didn't really drive home that groundhog day of events. I'm not 100% on what to pin point for it, but it was like "He's dead, he's not". Perhaps you could have made it as though the brain-dead father doesn't even know he's alive, because to him his son always dies at the end? Your wording was good throughout. Lyrically, I'd expect a slightly stronger piece from you because I know what you can do, but in the aspects of a topical this was a solid drop.

Freak: I find the first line ironic, because I felt that you didn't know which way to go. You touched on a few themes there. Lust for celebrity status, drug use and what not, but I found to quite hard to connect with what you were trying to say. I'm still not 100% on the story now. I think for your next drop, you should use the protagonist for your narrative. The "He did this" kind of format never allows for as much emotion to sink in. "I did this" allows you to say directly what you, the protagonist, feels, and not just give details of it. Your wording improved a lot here, and although the rhyming was quite simple, it helped the flow a lot.

Overall, this is a good little topical. I think one showed a higher level in a few different areas, so I'm going that way.

Enfinite Gets my Vote

Enfinite: I thought the concept was dope, but one little thing got to me. You didn't really drive home that groundhog day of events. I'm not 100% on what to pin point for it, but it was like "He's dead, he's not". Perhaps you could have made it as though the brain-dead father doesn't even know he's alive, because to him his son always dies at the end? Your wording was good throughout. Lyrically, I'd expect a slightly stronger piece from you because I know what you can do, but in the aspects of a topical this was a solid drop.

Freak: I find the first line ironic, because I felt that you didn't know which way to go. You touched on a few themes there. Lust for celebrity status, drug use and what not, but I found to quite hard to connect with what you were trying to say. I'm still not 100% on the story now. I think for your next drop, you should use the protagonist for your narrative. The "He did this" kind of format never allows for as much emotion to sink in. "I did this" allows you to say directly what you, the protagonist, feels, and not just give details of it. Your wording improved a lot here, and although the rhyming was quite simple, it helped the flow a lot.

Overall, this is a good little topical. I think one showed a higher level in a few different areas, so I'm going that way.

Enfinite Gets my Vote