Topical Tournament Round 4: DonoTheGod (winner) vs Mind Fuck (loser)

[RhetoriK]

Rhyming Scheme/Flow - Both were a little wordy in places. I think MF had the better flow. I think that the compact format of Dono's worked against him in the cadence aspect.

Vocabulary - Dono's context was the selling point for me. I think MF's overall scope was dope, but it was lacking some innuendo's to make it a hotter read all together. And with a 50 line stipend, I'm sure he could have been much more descriptive.

Topic/Meaning - I was partial to one topic because of the potential it had, but on an end-to-end comparison, they both really shined. I'll call this one a tie because it's deeper than just to topic that decided the battle.

Storytelling/Progression - As even as it was execution-wise, I think stylistically I'm leaning toward Dono simply because it flipped my wig a little more when his plot twisted. It's an attribute of good writers when the reader is on the edge of being bored with the expository and they change the tide of the story in an instant. GOOOOD SHIT.

Emotion - MF was stronger here. And I'll tell you why.. It was more the originality of his sentiment here. Dono's was strong indeed, however if I were to summarize the two into a phrase "Tragic Loss Of A Child" and "Whips, Chains, And Necrophilia, Whoot!" Both were believable and dope though.

Imagery - MF. Even with the limited vocab, he still painted a vivid picture, dono's was more of a crescendo, he pulled out the big guns as he neared completion. I think MF's kept me more locked in.

Poetic Techniques - Dono spun better consistency and you could feel the downward spiral from the choke on. MF's was more like a straight up rap verse, which is fine, but yeah.. i have to give Dono the edge.

Ending - Dono. MF's was a straigh read-through with beginning middle and end. I like that Dono left a little up to interpretation. A beginning, middle, and end that SETUP THE NEXT BIT. You kind of start to think about the main character when all's said and done.

Overall Vote = Dono the God by a hair... I'd love to see MF expound on that concept though, probably one of the most original angles taken this go-around.

Ups to both.

[RhetoriK]

Rhyming Scheme/Flow - Both were a little wordy in places. I think MF had the better flow. I think that the compact format of Dono's worked against him in the cadence aspect.

Vocabulary - Dono's context was the selling point for me. I think MF's overall scope was dope, but it was lacking some innuendo's to make it a hotter read all together. And with a 50 line stipend, I'm sure he could have been much more descriptive.

Topic/Meaning - I was partial to one topic because of the potential it had, but on an end-to-end comparison, they both really shined. I'll call this one a tie because it's deeper than just to topic that decided the battle.

Storytelling/Progression - As even as it was execution-wise, I think stylistically I'm leaning toward Dono simply because it flipped my wig a little more when his plot twisted. It's an attribute of good writers when the reader is on the edge of being bored with the expository and they change the tide of the story in an instant. GOOOOD SHIT.

Emotion - MF was stronger here. And I'll tell you why.. It was more the originality of his sentiment here. Dono's was strong indeed, however if I were to summarize the two into a phrase "Tragic Loss Of A Child" and "Whips, Chains, And Necrophilia, Whoot!" Both were believable and dope though.

Imagery - MF. Even with the limited vocab, he still painted a vivid picture, dono's was more of a crescendo, he pulled out the big guns as he neared completion. I think MF's kept me more locked in.

Poetic Techniques - Dono spun better consistency and you could feel the downward spiral from the choke on. MF's was more like a straight up rap verse, which is fine, but yeah.. i have to give Dono the edge.

Ending - Dono. MF's was a straigh read-through with beginning middle and end. I like that Dono left a little up to interpretation. A beginning, middle, and end that SETUP THE NEXT BIT. You kind of start to think about the main character when all's said and done.

Overall Vote = Dono the God by a hair... I'd love to see MF expound on that concept though, probably one of the most original angles taken this go-around.

Ups to both.