ATT Round 2: Writer 6 Vs Writer 14 - (Writer 6 Wins 5-0)

Writer 6 - I'm not 100% on the story. The film is a metaphor for the woman's real life? I don't know, something about it didn't click. Lyrically, the whole thing was very solid. I was able to flow through the entire thing effortlessly and it was an enjoyable piece to read. Perhaps a slight influence from poetry would boost it forward a little bit. The metaphor of the teddy bears being adopted was great.

Writer 14 - The topic was alright. A little bit predictable and safe, and I'd have maybe liked to see a little bit more reference to the teddy bears in the picture, but storyline wise you did okay. Lyrically, I found quite a few of the rhymes to be a bit broken. Also, try and stick to end of line rhyme because it was slightly hard to predict where the rhyme was coming each time. Good potential though.

Overall, I think one takes this in every area.

GMV - Writer 6

Writer 6 - I'm not 100% on the story. The film is a metaphor for the woman's real life? I don't know, something about it didn't click. Lyrically, the whole thing was very solid. I was able to flow through the entire thing effortlessly and it was an enjoyable piece to read. Perhaps a slight influence from poetry would boost it forward a little bit. The metaphor of the teddy bears being adopted was great.

Writer 14 - The topic was alright. A little bit predictable and safe, and I'd have maybe liked to see a little bit more reference to the teddy bears in the picture, but storyline wise you did okay. Lyrically, I found quite a few of the rhymes to be a bit broken. Also, try and stick to end of line rhyme because it was slightly hard to predict where the rhyme was coming each time. Good potential though.

Overall, I think one takes this in every area.

GMV - Writer 6