ATT Round 1: Writer 13 vs. Writer 20 (Writer 20 wins 3-0)

[IAmFlow]

Writer 13 - I thought with the quote, the killer/book topic was the most obvious approach you could have went with. When I first read the quote, I thought of OJ Simpsons story. You progressed throughout it pretty well. I thought the opening was a bit slow, but you closed off the topical on a good note. As far as the flow and rhyme scheme, it wasn't always on point. I thought you had areas that you shined in and some of it just wasn't working. Some just seemed too simplistic that you lacked in the imagery and descriptive departments. overall it was an okay drop.

Writer 20 - Thought you took a more outlandish creative approach. Especially turning into a comic sense with the spiderman topic. The flow and wording were good for the most part. There was a few sections that it didn't sound as smooth. I like the way it ended off using his web as an art and apologizing. However, you could have done a much better job of tying all that together, yes he apologized, and made art with the web, but an apology necessarily doesn't make it a confession. I can tell you have decent skill with imagery as well, there was a few spots I thought you did well in that area. Also, I would suggest cleaning up the verse and fixing you structure. That's a mess and idk about everyone else, but personally, I find it a pain in the ass and annoying when I have to read it as a big blob.

MGVT: Writer 20 - Both had completely different approaches here. 13 had more of your typical, unoriginal topic but I thought his was laced with the quote a bit better. 20 took the bigger risk, with a topic that I doubt anyone else would have used, so although he had the originality, he didn't fully interlock the quote with his because of that I felt there were about equal in that. He got my vote for having the verse was just written better as far as wording, and rhyme schemes. Both writers here could use some polish work. Goodluck to both of you.

[IAmFlow]

Writer 13 - I thought with the quote, the killer/book topic was the most obvious approach you could have went with. When I first read the quote, I thought of OJ Simpsons story. You progressed throughout it pretty well. I thought the opening was a bit slow, but you closed off the topical on a good note. As far as the flow and rhyme scheme, it wasn't always on point. I thought you had areas that you shined in and some of it just wasn't working. Some just seemed too simplistic that you lacked in the imagery and descriptive departments. overall it was an okay drop.

Writer 20 - Thought you took a more outlandish creative approach. Especially turning into a comic sense with the spiderman topic. The flow and wording were good for the most part. There was a few sections that it didn't sound as smooth. I like the way it ended off using his web as an art and apologizing. However, you could have done a much better job of tying all that together, yes he apologized, and made art with the web, but an apology necessarily doesn't make it a confession. I can tell you have decent skill with imagery as well, there was a few spots I thought you did well in that area. Also, I would suggest cleaning up the verse and fixing you structure. That's a mess and idk about everyone else, but personally, I find it a pain in the ass and annoying when I have to read it as a big blob.

MGVT: Writer 20 - Both had completely different approaches here. 13 had more of your typical, unoriginal topic but I thought his was laced with the quote a bit better. 20 took the bigger risk, with a topic that I doubt anyone else would have used, so although he had the originality, he didn't fully interlock the quote with his because of that I felt there were about equal in that. He got my vote for having the verse was just written better as far as wording, and rhyme schemes. Both writers here could use some polish work. Goodluck to both of you.