Fame - Those Eyes Feat. Dono & Muggz

[FAME]

Lets Beef Track: Those Eyes Feat. Dono & Muggz - By: FAME

Lets Beef Track: Those Eyes Feat. Dono & Muggz - By: FAME

Listen/comment/rate... All that good shit #MURDA

[FAME]

Lets Beef Track: Those Eyes Feat. Dono & Muggz - By: FAME

Lets Beef Track: Those Eyes Feat. Dono & Muggz - By: FAME

Listen/comment/rate... All that good shit #MURDA

[GRizzEAT]

then go download MvH'S Mixtape.. In tha shadows of Murder, or sumn like that

[GRizzEAT]

then go download MvH'S Mixtape.. In tha shadows of Murder, or sumn like that

[Babylon]

Dono - Flow sounds forced & odd, seems like every time you try to do faster flows it comes off as such. You have a nasally delivery, so the faster stuff comes off as odd. That, and your rhyming was especially basic in this one (starin'/apparant/wearin/sharin. cute/loose/moves/do games/gaze/change) which significantly contributed to the formulaic aspect of your verse.

Fame - Flow was nice, rhyming was a bit above average with only a few basic areas. Your deliver was on point, too.

Muggz - Rhyming was the best out of the three, so naturally the flow was also good. Delivery was there, and your cadence was confident.

Overall - I wish everyone's verses were a bit longer, as Fame & Muggz only had a few bars in theirs, while Dono went a bit faster so he had more content. The beat was nice, and the hook was great as most Fame hooks are. I don't necessarily bump this type of track often, but this one was executed nicely.

[Babylon]

Dono - Flow sounds forced & odd, seems like every time you try to do faster flows it comes off as such. You have a nasally delivery, so the faster stuff comes off as odd. That, and your rhyming was especially basic in this one (starin'/apparant/wearin/sharin. cute/loose/moves/do games/gaze/change) which significantly contributed to the formulaic aspect of your verse.

Fame - Flow was nice, rhyming was a bit above average with only a few basic areas. Your deliver was on point, too.

Muggz - Rhyming was the best out of the three, so naturally the flow was also good. Delivery was there, and your cadence was confident.

Overall - I wish everyone's verses were a bit longer, as Fame & Muggz only had a few bars in theirs, while Dono went a bit faster so he had more content. The beat was nice, and the hook was great as most Fame hooks are. I don't necessarily bump this type of track often, but this one was executed nicely.

[FAME]

Originally Posted by Crysis

Dono - Flow sounds forced & odd, seems like every time you try to do faster flows it comes off as such. You have a nasally delivery, so the faster stuff comes off as odd. That, and your rhyming was especially basic in this one (starin'/apparant/wearin/sharin. cute/loose/moves/do games/gaze/change) which significantly contributed to the formulaic aspect of your verse.

Fame - Flow was nice, rhyming was a bit above average with only a few basic areas. Your deliver was on point, too.

Muggz - Rhyming was the best out of the three, so naturally the flow was also good. Delivery was there, and your cadence was confident.

Overall - I wish everyone's verses were a bit longer, as Fame & Muggz only had a few bars in theirs, while Dono went a bit faster so he had more content. The beat was nice, and the hook was great as most Fame hooks are. I don't necessarily bump this type of track often, but this one was executed nicely.

Appreciate the detailed feedback my dude.

LOL @ @Sax describing it as 'Ayo Technology with an Akon twist'

[FAME]

Originally Posted by Crysis

Dono - Flow sounds forced & odd, seems like every time you try to do faster flows it comes off as such. You have a nasally delivery, so the faster stuff comes off as odd. That, and your rhyming was especially basic in this one (starin'/apparant/wearin/sharin. cute/loose/moves/do games/gaze/change) which significantly contributed to the formulaic aspect of your verse.

Fame - Flow was nice, rhyming was a bit above average with only a few basic areas. Your deliver was on point, too.

Muggz - Rhyming was the best out of the three, so naturally the flow was also good. Delivery was there, and your cadence was confident.

Overall - I wish everyone's verses were a bit longer, as Fame & Muggz only had a few bars in theirs, while Dono went a bit faster so he had more content. The beat was nice, and the hook was great as most Fame hooks are. I don't necessarily bump this type of track often, but this one was executed nicely.

Appreciate the detailed feedback my dude.

LOL @ @Sax describing it as 'Ayo Technology with an Akon twist'

[Saxx]

It fucking is man!!! First time I heard it I thought 'ayo technology' I frigging love that style! Lovin the track but not sure how I rated it a 0 instead of a 10!!

I'll give a few more listens n give a detailed breakdown later tonight.

Fame let me try n spit on it next month!

[Saxx]

It fucking is man!!! First time I heard it I thought 'ayo technology' I frigging love that style! Lovin the track but not sure how I rated it a 0 instead of a 10!!

I'll give a few more listens n give a detailed breakdown later tonight.

Fame let me try n spit on it next month!

[GRizzEAT]

much appreciation @Crysis

[GRizzEAT]

much appreciation @Crysis

[Saxx]

Right im a big fan of this track and i wanna see more collabs with UK/US guys on here!

Anyway let's get it to it. Bad points first.

Dono: Like Crysis said the fast bits were very hard to hear/understand and i expected a bit more to be honest after seeing your videos etc. Also considering how good the clarity of the beat and backing vocals were, when you jumped in the lack of audio quality was very obvious.

Fame: In my opinion the best out of the three especially vocally. Could use a bit of fine tuning but was great, the audio clarity was also there too.

Muggz: Again few little adjustments and you are all good. I think you were definately held back by the shortness of your verse as i felt it fell off towards the end.

The track: The rapping parts were just too short or maybe you guys need to rap a lot faster. Im no master rapper but if i was on this i would have been practicing and practicing at making this as fast and intelligible as i could possibly make it.

Overall i think you guys just need to fine tune a few things taking on board the comments people have made. I hate criticism but these few points were probably not even picked up by yourselves and as long as the criticism isn't changing you artisticly then its not a problem.

I wanted to rate it a 10 but somehow its came out as zero. Provided the few things that need changing are changed i would be happily give a full 10 on the next version.

I also think this could be a top 10 track on LB all time.

[Saxx]

Right im a big fan of this track and i wanna see more collabs with UK/US guys on here!

Anyway let's get it to it. Bad points first.

Dono: Like Crysis said the fast bits were very hard to hear/understand and i expected a bit more to be honest after seeing your videos etc. Also considering how good the clarity of the beat and backing vocals were, when you jumped in the lack of audio quality was very obvious.

Fame: In my opinion the best out of the three especially vocally. Could use a bit of fine tuning but was great, the audio clarity was also there too.

Muggz: Again few little adjustments and you are all good. I think you were definately held back by the shortness of your verse as i felt it fell off towards the end.

The track: The rapping parts were just too short or maybe you guys need to rap a lot faster. Im no master rapper but if i was on this i would have been practicing and practicing at making this as fast and intelligible as i could possibly make it.

Overall i think you guys just need to fine tune a few things taking on board the comments people have made. I hate criticism but these few points were probably not even picked up by yourselves and as long as the criticism isn't changing you artisticly then its not a problem.

I wanted to rate it a 10 but somehow its came out as zero. Provided the few things that need changing are changed i would be happily give a full 10 on the next version.

I also think this could be a top 10 track on LB all time.

[Dono]

@FAME

The quality of my verse on this version is significantly lower than what I originally sent you.

Between the version I sent you and the one you sent me back with your verse did you increase the volume of the beat with my vocals on it a lot or do something to it? I'd like to get it fixed up. It definitely sounds different. In a bad way.

[Dono]

@FAME

The quality of my verse on this version is significantly lower than what I originally sent you.

Between the version I sent you and the one you sent me back with your verse did you increase the volume of the beat with my vocals on it a lot or do something to it? I'd like to get it fixed up. It definitely sounds different. In a bad way.

[Saxx]

happy to help the tracks a stunner..

If you guys do a remake I would put sound quality and voice clarity high on your list of importance. I count that you guys have roughly 28 seconds each give or take to spit the quickest and BEST bars that make as much impact as you can in that time. Do that and you got a hall of fame track right there imo

[Saxx]

happy to help the tracks a stunner..

If you guys do a remake I would put sound quality and voice clarity high on your list of importance. I count that you guys have roughly 28 seconds each give or take to spit the quickest and BEST bars that make as much impact as you can in that time. Do that and you got a hall of fame track right there imo

[FAME]

Originally Posted by Dono

@FAME

The quality of my verse on this version is significantly lower than what I originally sent you.

Between the version I sent you and the one you sent me back with your verse did you increase the volume of the beat with my vocals on it a lot or do something to it? I'd like to get it fixed up. It definitely sounds different. In a bad way.

Didn't touch it in the slightest dude :/

[FAME]

Originally Posted by Dono

@FAME

The quality of my verse on this version is significantly lower than what I originally sent you.

Between the version I sent you and the one you sent me back with your verse did you increase the volume of the beat with my vocals on it a lot or do something to it? I'd like to get it fixed up. It definitely sounds different. In a bad way.

Didn't touch it in the slightest dude :/