writer 8's first few lines had me already zoning out, too much description about one point, and i was zoned out throughout reading the whole piece. Rhyming was basic throughout as well. Writer 9 had me focused on the start no homo lol. liked the way he seperated each group of lines which made me feel i was going somewhere as i read on. Was just a lil over basic with the rhyming. He didnt spend too much time with detail on one point but the image was made, and the plot was progressing in a nice pace to keep me interested.
9>8
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