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Unread 12-15-2013, 05:15 PM
ELOH STACKz
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Sean Cron: nice drop my G. I think you Multi usage was real strong all throughout the verse. But I didn't really see a clear cut connection to your Topic. Your premise was decent, the whole assassination thing. But you left a lot of questions: was it murder for hire? Was this his first target? Who was Vindicated? If he felt bad about Killing the priest, why did he stab him?... I guess that was supposed to be the hypocritical part, right? It's like, I see the puzzle pieces, but I can't piece it together.

Dono: I like the whole court room scenario. I actually did the same thing in my Topical. Unfortunately my opponent no showed & it went to waste. You rhyme scheme wasn't as complex as your opponent, but your imagery was better. I felt like I was in that Court-room & saw the Judge getting cuffed. Nice little plot twist at the end too, I like the misdirection with the Guilty Drug Dealer. I think you did a better job incorporating the "Hypocritical Vindication" topic too. You used the corrupt Judge as your Hypocritical component. He's supposed to uphold the law & gets caught taking illegal bribes. How can he prosecute criminals when he is one himself? Good cops & victims of the wrongfully sentenced feel Vindication. So I'm gonna have to give you some extra points for that.

Vote: Dono
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I'm so old i have trouble holding my poop in when i fart.......Hows that for imagery?
Might be a bit premature, but... Quote of the Year? Lol
Unread 12-15-2013, 05:15 PM   #6
 
ELOH STACKz
Live Battler
Estimated Skill in Audio: 7.97/10 starsEstimated Skill in Audio: 7.97/10 starsEstimated Skill in Audio: 7.97/10 starsEstimated Skill in Audio: 7.97/10 starsEstimated Skill in Audio: 7.97/10 starsEstimated Skill in Audio: 7.97/10 starsEstimated Skill in Audio: 7.97/10 starsEstimated Skill in Audio: 7.97/10 starsEstimated Skill in Audio: 7.97/10 starsEstimated Skill in Audio: 7.97/10 stars
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9 Won / 1 Lost
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131 Won / 38 Lost
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Sean Cron: nice drop my G. I think you Multi usage was real strong all throughout the verse. But I didn't really see a clear cut connection to your Topic. Your premise was decent, the whole assassination thing. But you left a lot of questions: was it murder for hire? Was this his first target? Who was Vindicated? If he felt bad about Killing the priest, why did he stab him?... I guess that was supposed to be the hypocritical part, right? It's like, I see the puzzle pieces, but I can't piece it together.

Dono: I like the whole court room scenario. I actually did the same thing in my Topical. Unfortunately my opponent no showed & it went to waste. You rhyme scheme wasn't as complex as your opponent, but your imagery was better. I felt like I was in that Court-room & saw the Judge getting cuffed. Nice little plot twist at the end too, I like the misdirection with the Guilty Drug Dealer. I think you did a better job incorporating the "Hypocritical Vindication" topic too. You used the corrupt Judge as your Hypocritical component. He's supposed to uphold the law & gets caught taking illegal bribes. How can he prosecute criminals when he is one himself? Good cops & victims of the wrongfully sentenced feel Vindication. So I'm gonna have to give you some extra points for that.

Vote: Dono
__________________
Your Punchlines? Miss me with that Bullshit...


ELOH_STACKz - "Money Callin": http://www.letsbeef.com/forums/prodd...2116-Money-663

Quote:
Originally Posted by ET the Refugee View Post
I'm so old i have trouble holding my poop in when i fart.......Hows that for imagery?
Might be a bit premature, but... Quote of the Year? Lol
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