One's topical I felt was extremely convoluted and was switching the main plot from one thing to another far too much for my liking. I did like the rhyming structure, but I felt that it was too strict to adhere to at times and the topical didn't really flow like it should have.
Other's topical I felt stuck to it's plot better and the story had me hooked in the whole entire way through because of it. Rhyming was more fluid and less of a regimented rhyme structure.
Overall, Dono gets my nod here.
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