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Unread 02-15-2013, 04:54 PM
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BB your verse was sick bro. I loved the storyline and the imagery was brilliant. I don't normally like how people set out a topical the way you did but in that verse it worked. I think you should be or complex with your rhyming, that's all. Overall fucking dope.

KaperX your verse started slowly but then picked up. I thought your idea was good but seemed to trail off a little before ending abruptly. Again more complex rhyming I think would have assisted and a little more length in your verse with a bit more description to paint the picture.

Overall vote to BB
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Unread 02-15-2013, 04:54 PM   #13
 
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BB your verse was sick bro. I loved the storyline and the imagery was brilliant. I don't normally like how people set out a topical the way you did but in that verse it worked. I think you should be or complex with your rhyming, that's all. Overall fucking dope.

KaperX your verse started slowly but then picked up. I thought your idea was good but seemed to trail off a little before ending abruptly. Again more complex rhyming I think would have assisted and a little more length in your verse with a bit more description to paint the picture.

Overall vote to BB
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